All Comments on 'An Ordinary Man's Life Ch. 03'

Please continue, this is a great story.

Ugly, stupid story!

Despite you not being native english spoken, your writing is well (might get you a B in creative writing)

It's amazing with two comments so far, one is positive one totally negative, but the votes tell a different story.

Even if my taste is a bit different, a well done from me, and keep it up.

Will read your other stories now, to see how they are compared to the english ones.

I tried to ignore it but it's just that bad I have to stop before punch someone as they pass by. Think of normal conversations.. the use of darling and my love is never used so early in a relationship. And never every second word as you seem to have done. Your imagination and description of events isn't bad at all .. just work on the dialogue please

Very nice, erotic story. Keep up the good work.