All Comments on 'An Unexpected Intrigue'

i know rape is wrong............but damn this was a HOT story

The story was good, you know that. But the ending was weak. So weak in fact that it let me down greatly. You did a great job handling the non-consent, the pleasure, the pain, the feelings, but the ending was too abrupt. Maybe have her see him in the apartment, and then there be a part two of how that excursion goes. Just a thought. Too much too fast is not good. It's like having a two minute orgasm. Dissatisfying.