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Click hereLisa's eyes were rolled back in her head now and she was whimpering in pleasure. Mary-Jane figured maybe she'd better ease off from her licking just a bit. She'd sucked Lisa into the 4th dimension, maybe she should slack off before Lisa sailed into the 5th. Mary-Jane wanted to suck this pussy for a good long time. She didn't wanna lose Lisa to the Twilight Zone!
She eased off licking Lisa's hot pussy and started just caressing Lisa's golden, sun-kissed body, gently, trying to calm the bundle of sex-nerves down just a little. She sucked up a big mouthful of sweet cunt-sauce and moved up to kiss her darling.
Lisa's eyes were closed and her head was rolling on the pillow. Gently, lovingly, Mary-Jane took Lisa's head in her hands and fastened her lips to Lisa's. Lisa's mouth opened and her tongue went into Mary-Jane's mouth, to swirl around in all her own cunt-honey that Mary-Jane had in there.
Lisa's young body was still twitching with the after-thrills of all her cums. Mary-Jane kissed her and kissed her and kissed her. The two girls rolled around on Mary-Jane's bed and mashed their titties together, inter-twined their legs and rubbed their cunts together. They kissed lips. They sucked tongues. They squealed. They sucked. They kissed some more.
They were in love.
- COMMENTS
kaleonanialmost 2 years agoNice to see a girl that had the ability to reject the advances of a predator, Lisa is a cool girl unlike a her friend who almost succumbed her to a self indulging animal that only cared about his own pleasure. Lesbians are good lovers, much better than predatory men but unfortunately there are women who gravitate towards predators.
azure_skiesover 10 years agoAh! Anonymous, there you are - I'd recognise your wit and erudition anywhere. Your comments tell me so much about you. You certainly get around but may I suggest you try some of the other Lit categories?
Meanwhile, this is a great idea and I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the series.
Wakashuover 10 years agoOK, I took the hook.
Would like to see next chapter.
Try to be a bit more net. Too much reading will loose your audience.
Best!
Anonymousover 10 years agoI totally agree with SomethingInTheWaySheMoves. I can't lie, I skipped a lot of parts because I thought it was redundant. I thoroughly enjoyed the story though. It was easy to relate, not for me because I was de-cherried @ 15 haha but I can see how others could understand Lisa's dilemma. And also, maybe I missed it when I was skipping ahead, what makes this story about an unusual family? The title is a bit misleading, I expected a tale of sisterly incest, but this was nothing of the sort. Overall, in spite of, it was a great story & you should definitely post the next chapters...
Anonymousover 10 years agoI, too, enjoyed the story and agree with the comments previously made.
I would add that a bit more dialog would bring the story more to life. Please consider this request.
SomethingInTheWaySheMovesover 10 years agoYou did a great job with this story. If I might make a suggestion, though, it would benefit from a little impartial editing. You did a thorough job of explaining the thoughts and motivations of the characters, but those explanations could have been pared down. You would explain what a character was thinking, and why, so that your readers would identify with them. That's a good thing, don't get me wrong, but then you'd continue to go over the same ground again to the point where you were belaboring the point. Trust your readers to follow your line of thought, and to get the point quickly, and then move on.
If your readers have time to think to themselves "Didn't the author already explain this?" their attention is beginning to wander. To keep them interested in the events as they unfold, you should be presenting "new" stimuli. Instead of wondering "Didn't Stamman already explain this?" we should be wondering "What happens next?" To keep us engrossed in the story, we should be anxious to read the next paragraph to find out what does happen next, and not tempted to skip over it because we "already" know what you're writing.
You write clearly, without obvious errors in grammar or spelling that so many other stories here have, and you write well, which so many other authors here do not. Take advantage of your ability, and trust yourself to explain a situation well enough the first time that you don't have to revisit that explanation again.
I hope you do continue the story, but I also hope you implement that advice.
