All Comments on 'Andi's First Time'

Very well thought out story. Some confusing dialogue or language but not enough to ruin the story. Loved the sex very well written. Hope to read your other work and that you continue to write.

But his is the best example of how a story would be greatly improved by using the first person. You could say "I" and "me" instead of Andi over and over and you could say "her' and "she" instead of "her lover", "the woman," "the tall woman," etc. It would read much easier.