All Comments on 'Angela's Desires Ch. 01'

hope to read more from this line

This needs dialogue, prose is all very well but makes for a very dull read. The characters need to interact between each other which they don't do here. Since this is Ch. 1, let's hope that in Ch. 2 mom wakes up and she and her son get to speak to each other. I look forward to reading it as I am sure you have the ability to lift a currently mundane story to one of really hot and horny proportions. Go for it.

Is this EROTIC?

Nice start to the story. You need proof reading and an editor.

Lemme see now:

1. Mom passed out

2. Kid abuses Mom

3. Mom passes out again

4. This time, kid fucks Mom

5. Mom isn't really passed out

6. Mom confronts kid with smile and satisfied grin

7. they have sex the rest of their lives

Ho-hum.

Keep the story going , nice premise to build on.

With plenty of ways you can develop the storyline.Keep writing.

Is this erotic? Damned right it is. It's a breakthrough and a the start of a story line that needs to be continued.

This holds the promise of being a super hot series. It's a damn shame that the author has not followed up on this. Maybe this might inspire him.

hmmm sexy

A terrible story.so badly written and words missing could not finish it.if English is your first language please go back to school.