All Comments on 'Another Chance Ch. 02'

I hope this is not the end of the story ??! : ) lol cas i was just getting addicted to this story. post more soon .

beautifully written,I will look out for further stories from you.

A feel-good kind of story and I liked it. One thing I did notice was that you repeated yourself when describing him giving oral sex. I think each time you used basically the same phrase, which was that he "curled (his tongue) so that he could get more of her juices." This is a minor nitpick, but by the third time, it jumped out at me.<br><br>

I would say for future stories, you could flesh out the details and subplots more. Such as with his daughter, her feelings of jealousy over his new girlfriend, etc. Adding drama to a story gives it some spice. Having the issue resolve to easily took a bit of spice back out. <br><br>

All in all, a very nice first submission. Good job.

TH, with this story. May your future submissions be as good. Thank You. Ronnie W.