by Angelle1991
Yep, turned off by the third word!!!
"I saw you first ..."
I find there is nothing more off-putting than the writer trying to pretend that the reader is/was part of the action!
The reader knows full well that they were not and therefore there is not the faintest semblance of believability in the entire story! Result? Total waste of time reading any further.
the person above me is a moron. This story was GREAT! Loved it! 5 stars.
I am referring to anonymous, he doesn't write, he doesn't have the guts to leave a name he just writes bullshit on a continuous basis.