All Comments on 'Art and Orgies and Che'

Please continue the story....need more ;-)

More. And the male bi side you hinted at? I'd like some more of that, too.

Nice! Liked the ending.

Why the 'Hollywood' fairytale ending? Spoilt an excellent story.

You really did a great job here. It started to become difficult to read because I was afraid the way it ended would let me down. But I pushed on, and was pleasantly rewarded. It only became difficult because I was worried about Lara, I didn't like the path she had chosen. You see, you succeeded in making me care about Lara 2 lit pages into the story. Nice work.

I felt like I knew the characters, only some of the names were changed. I had a few people I knew who walked down that road. Dreamers, they say. But eventually you have to cut the long hair, eh?

Hope to see more of your work.

I really love your writing, very hot, except for one little thing. You use ellipses way too much, and it makes the story really hard to read when every dialogue is broken up by a train of periods. For example: "Oh, and some...waffles. I really like... waffles." There's no reason for a pause inserted before every mention of waffles, and it's a little distracting. Otherwise, amazing job!

Thank you for your kind comments and suggestions. I'm trying very hard to rein in my obsession with ellipses...so, thanks for that! (there I go again - lol!)

I have fun writing my stories, and I hope you have fun reading them! *winks*

Onna

I'd love to read more back story about Jenni as well as Ash and any other new characters you'd like to throw in.