by julybear7
Thank you. Well written and thought out. Classy, sexy and thoroughly enjoyable. I liked theat the sex scenes are fun and respectful. Too many here treat the women characters like dirt. Very fun read!
What's the point with powers/the gift if he's sharing all the girls with others? Gross!!
I really enjoyed this story, the fact that the main character, in the end of the story, really proved to be a "nice" guy. He may have used his new power, in forcing his prof, for his own enjoyment, but also made sure that his partner enjoyed herself. I'm a sucker for "nice" guy/gal angles. Please don't let his new power change him, if there are more chapters. Thanks again for this story & please more chapters. RG
A brilliant storyline, oft repeated but still very much your own. I will enjoy this one.
As a lover of all things Egyptian I was drawn to this story. I was not disappointed.
A lot of different characters were introduced into the story and Deon either had sex with them or had a promise to have sex with them. Just the kind of story that keeps my interest and wanting more of the same.
So now that Deon knows a little about his abilities, will he try to find the limits of his power?
Very interesting and a fast moving story, along with being well written and nicely edited.
Thanks for the read.
if this chapter were 20 pages longer it still would not be enough...more!...more!!!
and have us meeting his sister soon; will this story go in the family direction? If so a warning to those who don't like that kind of thing would be appropriate.
great story with promise for much more what a way to start. whats more important as a writer is the continuity that runs through the story keep up the great work!
Very good with a heavy hint of more to come in various ways both appropriate and not. Your protagonist and the other characters can make for many more chapters to come. Somehow I doubt he will limit himself to the females introduced in the first chapter, or at least I hope so. Very good job with a somewhat familiar premise. More please, much more.
Jerry in Washington state, USA - I enjoyed this first chapter and look forward to more. I liked the section of how Astarte and Gideon "met". I also enjoyed the "limits" of Gideon's power. It will be interesting to me to see what direction you take this story. Nicely written sex scenes, too.