by L.A. Wicker
I have to be honest, at first I didn't know how I'd feel about that kind of a relationship, but the way you presented it, it was absolutely beautiful, romantic and genuine. 5 of 5!!
Funny how the small tight briefs he was wearing under his jeans magically turned into silk boxers when he took the jeans off.
This is an outstanding story, I love the way you have written and told the story. I hoped there would have been the reading of the will, I would have loved to find out how the Grandfather felt at the end about the other children and what he left them.........
But one huge mistake. So Raven was half the age of her siblings at 35. Tim is 18 just out of High School puts his mom in her 50's having a baby, very unlikely. Gramps has to be in his 90's and 60's with a new baby, do able. Fix it with Raven being no older than 25 or younger, otherwise you're an idiot.
This story walks a fine line and I'm not sure what side it falls on.
Raven's character is written as being cognitively impaired having sex with someone who just became an adult.
Even as a legal adult, Tim, in my opinion, is still too young to be held accountable for such a difficult decision. He truly cares about her, but does that matter?
As for the "smoking troll", yeah, smoking causes cancer. fouling the air we breathe and water we drink for hundreds of years is causing cancer. Gamma rays from the sun cause cancer. If you live long enough, and nothing else kills you, cancer will. When the cells in your body replicate enough times, eventually a cancerous mutation will occur. I don't smoke, and I don't date people who do. At this time, people have a right to choose to smoke or not to. I choose not to. I also choose to try not to judge others.
This is one of the better stories I've read. A few grammatical errors aside; you have woven a wonderful tale and it was very well balanced. I do hope to read more of this series and from you. Congratulations on wonderful story.
(8/21/2021)You made me cry; you made me angry; you made me question my sense of morality. Can we make exceptions; should we make exceptions? In short, you made me an emotional wreck. You submitted four more works titled "Aunt Raven" the last in 2011 titled "Aunt Raven: "The Reading of The Will" I plan on reading them in chronological order. I'm grateful to you for submitting this story; you made it so real. I see from your list of submissions that you stopped in 2012. I hope you're still getting comment alerts. Thank you.
How about an expansion or something to this series? The Raven series was a good basis for a full Literotica novel.
I found myself smiling, grimacing, elated as I followed the characters in the story. No doubt Raven and Tim are left with the vast fortune. My hope is you pick up as their lives continue. Children? Dealing with the stress of litigation? New friends? Please write more. You breathed life into characters that deserve to continue to live. Thank you!
What happened when the will was read, ?
What was the reactions of the other family members?
Normally I prefer more action....but this story was nothing short of perfect, in every way. If there were errors of any kind, I missed them completely. A perfect blend of character development, sensuality, erotica, and plain old sex, with a few other goodies tossed in for fun. Bravo!!
Well written fantastic characters that jump off the page and come to life love your work
You write excellent stories, although some are shorter and leave us wondering and there are spelling errors but not bad enough that I can't quickly read through
THIS IS THE GREATEST STORY ON THIS SITE. DRAMA, HUMOR, TRAGGITY, AND A LITTLE SENSUAL SEX, THAT WAS JUST LOVING PRESENTED AND NOT DIRTY. KEEP IT UP. I HOPE THE OTHER STORIES ARE JUST AS GOOD. AND IF THEY ARE, LET'S HOPE YOU KEEP WRITING A NEW STORY SERIES WITH A FOLLOW-UP OF AUNT RAVEN AND HER NEFEW, TIM. I WOULD LIKE TO KNOW HOW EVERYTHING WORKS OUT AS A FAMILY.
OMG, This was the best I've ever read!!! You made this story so real and every word put the reader in a visual place to see each person. If you would lengthen it you could make a movie that would be a top seller! All being said you really need to write a finishing story to bring a happy ending to Tim and Raven's lives along with the arrogant siblings that got nothing. Thank you!!!
This was amazing! This is the best story I have read here. In the 10 years or so I have been coming here, I have never had a story "move" me as much as this one did. It actually brought a couple of tears to my eyes. I am going to go read the other Aunt Raven stories now. GREAT JOB!.
I have read a lot of these stories. But I have never been engrossed as much as I have with this one. this is a love story not just some jerk story to get your rocks off. You desperately need to make more chapters of this. If for no other reason just so we can see what his cunt of a mother gets what's coming to her. Or should I say what's not coming to her. LOL.. Please at least write one more chapter preferably three pages long.
Loved this so very much. I would love to read what happens next though. I think this story is far too loving and emotional to leave it here.
I just finished reading it, and it was just great! Keep up the great work! Have you thought of writting a continuation to this story, it could go in so many directions, but with your talent, I just know it would be a great follow up to the story! Two thumbs up!!!
If Raven is half the age of her siblings and she is 35, that makes them around 70. Did I miss something somewhere?
It's a well written story w/ strong characterization, but I sincerely hope that there is an explanation in part two that displays that she's actually not cognitively impaired. If she is, this story is pretty fucked up.
I wish your story continued on.
Thank you for your work. The characters were rich.
This is pure brilliance I loved every word and hope you continue with lots more chapters and I hope Jen gets fucked over big time what a bitch.
It was great got me wanting more best story I've read in years no hand down u got that details I mean wow
it was a beautiful story I had to finish it once I started and just by the end you know the family went nuts
Am I the only one who thinks it's inappropriate for Tim to take advantage of Raven? I know, I'm trying to raise a question about morality in an incest story. Seriously though, how is Raven different from a child intellectually? Can she legally give consent?
Now the action begins Raven and Tim will be together for every.Ron
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I really enjoyed this story and hope you've written a sequel. Of course we all know how it turns out but sure would love to be a fly on the wall when the will is read.
Such a touching and loving story. It is in my favorites and this is my umpth time to read it.I will not say much more because I do not want to spoil it for your other readers just going to say a fantastic story.
Ron Texas
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I just met Raven and I'm already in love with her. Such great characters!
Thank you so much.
Good story. The story line flowed well and of corse any man who read it must have loved how Raven decides she loves the taste of Tim's cum and sucking he's big, hard thingy. Not to be an ass but just a little comment about editing. I'm not saying rewrites are called for or anything as drastic as that just rereading and possibly catching some miss spellings or gramerical errors. I applaud your work though. I have had to retread everything I have ever written to make corrections. At least your story was excepted.
GREAT STORY I HAVE READ NUMEROUS TIMES SO RAVEN WILL HAVE LOTZ SPACE TO RIDE HER 4 WHEELER AND LOVE TIM
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I am certain that Jen would bite her liver, curse and scream before they kick her out of the house. Such fun! Thank you for writing.
I'm one who likes to see a story to its end...and the perfect end would have been to see the reading of the will and the furious mother getting what she deserved...rather than leave a great erotic story up in the air, add another paragraph or two...
That was a great read I've always been interested in incest and
wow what a great story
What a beautiful story wanted it to be longer to see the rest of the family go up in flames when the will was read
The title says it all.. thanks for your work onthis story.
Don't listen to the meathead who won't even use his name, whining about you having Tim smoking a few cigarettes. There are some morons who just can't mind their own business and can't stand having people enjoying a few guilty pleasures.
SMOKING CAUSES CANCER WHICH KILLS PEOPLE SO WHY INTRODUCE IT IN TO YOUR STORIES YOU BRAIN DEAD MORON - JUST CANNOT BELIEVE YOU ARE SUCH A BRAINLESS PLONKER....
Excellent character development and a great storyline. I just hope it's going where I think it's going.
Excellent writing, unique plot, intriguing characters. Don't leave petulant comments, it ill becomes you and is beneath you. Remember, readership is a Bell Curve and you will get some doozies.
This is a great story. Liked the ending. Tim's mother doesn't deserve anything.
Just finished the story of Aunt Raven. I haven't peeked at the remainder, yet. I know what I anticipate though. :-) You sure know how to make a person anticipate, with every word you write. Excellent! Your descriptions made every longing, every move, every emotion, pure but lovable hell. Keep writing. I look forward to reading the other chapters.
This story just had me in anticipation and excitement at the mother being put in her place. Ugh. Please continue as soon as possible.
really liked the story the only problem I had was the editing. Other then that keep up the great work.
I really enjoyed reading this story. Tim and Raven were so hot together, I would have enjoyed reading how the evil family members got the shaft while our two lovers banged that awesome ass.
Please write another few chapters, if you feel inspired to do so.
I would love to read more.
Thank you
good story, but you should do some proof reading and polishing before you publish it.
i just loved this story and i hope to read more about how Tim and Raven and how they got one over on his mother.she was truly being a bitch about everything and needs to be told off if not by Tim then by Raven. Keep up the great job.
I hope that there will be a chapter 2, as i wanrt to hear tim tell his mother to fuck off and die,
Rusty
This is one of the Best stories I have ever read. I couldn't help but get emotionally involved as I read this story. I could literally feel myself getting angry at the mother and even heartbroken at the death of the grandfather amongst other things. This is truely ONE OF THE BEST stories I have read. I hope you continue with this story. You have a great writing talent and hope to see more in the futue.
Normally, a story containing a character of under-developed mental capacity would turn my stomach and raise my anger levels to record heights. This story, however, has been written with a sensitvity that had me cheering for the couple and the loving Grandfather while, at the same time, loathing the despicable family members, particularly Jen.
To create such strong emotions in a reader takes a special talent and Mr. Wicker has plenty of it. Bravo!
5/5
I loved the concept of the innocent child in the bombshell body (BTW, Raven's body type just happens to be my ideal, right down to the hair color- way to go!). The fact that they "grew up together" helped add to the poignancy of the tale as did the forbidden nature of the protagonists love and the unjustified hatred and contempt the family had for Raven.
The thrill sexual discovery as seen through Raven's eyes was, well ... thrilling, while Tim's acceptance of the role and responsibility of sexual mentor to a woman some 17 or so years his senior, even as he is himself not much more than a neophyte, helped knock stereotypes on their ear, providing a fresh (and exciting) prospective on the Aunt-Nephew liaison genre.
Having the vile "legitimate" disinherited while Tim & Raven were set for life was a great way end the story.
Only criticism; spelling and grammar check please. Too often I had to insert a missing word or had to figure word was really intended, e.g., "want" in place of "what", and similar transpositions.
Otherwise -- Hot stuff! Bravo!
PS- Tim wasn't REALLY going to bugger that beauty - a bunghole virgin- without a decent bit of anal warm-up stretching & loosening ... was he?
damn i was reading this story and was getting into it and then it ended please write more and continue on with the story
man that was a good story, I understand about this website and all but dude you really need to finish this off right. I wanna know what happened, does Jen get her's, do Tim and Raven get the house.
One of the best I have read keep on writing so that we can all be entertained a lot more
Great story Hope you continue it would like to see the final outcome..
This probably one of the most sincere and erotic stories I have read to date. There were a few errors is some of the spelling but not enough to really bother me. Thanks for another great story. BTW it wouldn't hurt my feelings to see a continuation of this story.
this is the very first comment that I have written to an author. I never really feel the need to make a comment but this story is very different... I really enjoyed reading it! its so caring and loving and you write very well. BUT the ending killed me! I think you need to write just one more chapter! I would love to hear about jens reactions to the reading of the will and tim and ravens reactions. maybe write about them making love that night and tim comforting her over her fathers death. then maybe do a 3 months later with them on the beach talking about future plans. just a suggestion... cliff hangers drive me crazy :)
I read this story several months ago and thought it was awesome. Came across several other stories today that you wrote and have been reading one after the other until I came to this one and realized, "Wow...same great author, I should have known!" Keep up the great work!
You need to add some chapters to the story you have just started I think you could a novel here. Go own and show Raven and Tim and how they live and what advetures their life takes. The way you have written the story you could take this very many different ways.
To the person hiding behind anonymous saying this story is rape. First off I work for a non profit organization that helps individuals who are mentally retarded and developmentally disabled. I would classify Raven as borderline MR. There are test given to individuals to see if they can give 'consent.' Just because someone is slower than you doesn't mean they have to live less than you do.
Wicker this was a great story, as always I enjoy your work. I also wish you had continued with the reading of the will. Cause I would have liked to see Jen get her comeuppance. Thanks for the great read.
I really enjoyed this first part but I'd have liked to see it at least through the reading of the Will.
I read this story a good while ago and just read it again, which is rare for me. But, I too, found this to be a very good story and well written. Furthermore I agree with you absolutely about "anonymous" comments. There is really only two things on the site that make my blood boil and that is mindless anonymous comments and Samuelx. One you can't rebut or debate because you don't know who it is and the other does not have the mental capacity to debate. Please continue Mr Wicker.
hiding behind their anonymity. For goodness sake, people, look up the definitions of fiction, literature and most especially EROTICA. (L.A., I hope you read this comment.) This is one of the most beautiful pieces I have ever read. I am not an uneducated man, but I don't have enough superlatives in my command of the English Language to sufficiently express my admiration for what this story conveys. I have never read a better love story in my entire life. Thank you so much for all you do for this site and forgive the damned fools who wouldn't know talent if it kicked them in their asses.
i loved this story the characters were so indepth i felt like i was tim on more than one occasion ;) i think i am now in love with raven thank you for that very hot story
I thought that literotica did not allow rape stories? The situations you describe would be considered statutory rape in most states. Being mentally challenged is the same as a minor as far as the law is concerned.
This is such a wonderful story. it was sad touching and romantic. you did a wonderful job. keep this up
I LOVED this story, like I do mostly all your others. Only, this story has something a bit more. Great read, 10/10
Please expand on the story, tell more about what happens to Raven and tim! this is the best story on literotica, please expand on the story!
I could careless about grammer or spelling, This story was beautiful, Loving, Sad, Exciting, and held my attention the whole way through. The only thing missing, I wanted to hear what the will said in detail, and to find out the reactions of the family to it, exspeacialy Jen, Tims Mother. I do hope there will be a bite more to this story. Either way Wonderful Job. Thank You
I know this sounds like that of a professor, teacher whatever. However, the main things I can think of are grammatical and spelling errors. I recall maybe one or two short instances of "SDT" (no, for those without some form of education, I'm not taking about STD's). I would love to see a continuation.
Thanks for taking the story in a very different direction. A great statement for love and innocense.
Great story, loved it, only one thing was wrong(even then its not a big thing)- I just wish that you had continued the story long enough for all the bitchy relatives to find out that the estate was going to Raven and Tim, would have loved to read the reaction you put on Jen, but other than that it was a fantastic read. Hope to read more.
Very good story, keep up the good work! None of us get enough praise sometimes.