All Comments on 'Aunt Raven'

Good story I hope there will be another one What was in the letter? Hopefully He teaches his mother a lesson.

Very good story, please continue with. Good clifhanger by the way. Keep up the good work.

Really good story, although it would have been nice with a finnishing scene with all the relatives throwing tantrums etc...

Nevertheless a great story, hope you keep up the good work.

I can't believe it... someone who actually has attention to detail LOL, story was amazing. hopefully there will be another installment.

i loved this story and hope thereare more to come.. cant wait for reading of will

Loved it. Can't wait to read the next part.

Very well done story, loved it from beging to end. Hope you do atlest one more part to this i so wanted to read about the looks on Jens face and the rest when they got asked to leave the house and so on. Keep up the good work.

Very well done story, loved it from beging to end. Hope you do atlest one more part to this i so wanted to read about the looks on Jens face and the rest when they got asked to leave the house and so on. Keep up the good work.

Very well done story, loved it from beging to end. Hope you do atlest one more part to this i so wanted to read about the looks on Jens face and the rest when they got asked to leave the house and so on. Keep up the good work.

Your writing style is as fine as it gets. 'A Christmas Carol' comes to mind from your stories. the characters are well developed with great dialog. The story under the incest group was not the leading factor in the quality of the entire tale.

Thank You,

Brad

a great story,but the way you ended it.you did all the talking before the will was read,but what went down after the will was read.tim mom was so rude and how she was going to do this and that.what did tim mom do,what consequences did she pay.you show the cruel side of the mom and how she make themsad,but you didn't show their joy and happiness and the mom down fall.that us me and that not negative just thinking.

Easy now, I wasn't going to, but part two will be started very soon.

Again, thank you.

L.A.Wicker

Thank you for the time and effort you put into this story - a superb combination of deep emotion and erotica. The love scenes are hot and one can almost taste and feel their love and joy for each other.

This will go into my alltime favourite collection

Please follow up on this

An excellent job. I loved the fact that you took the time to make us care about the characters and not just that they had sex. Well written overall (maybe just a little repetetive an a couple of spots) and just enough to leave us wanting more. Good job.

I have never left a comment for any other story I have read, but this one demands it.

I was captured from the beginning to the end, I want more...more!!

Please finish the story, you cant leave me hanging like this...LOL

Thank you much for sharing!!!!

Please continue with the reading of the will and the happy times they are bound to share.

it was a breath of freash air...very well done...please finish

First time I ever commented on a story.

Very tasfully written

I enjoyed the fact that it was not only erotic, but romantic... I salute you!

Thank all of you again. Never have I had so many nice things said about my stories!

THANK YOU.

L.A.Wicker

Great story,first class characterisation,brilliantly written.Glad to hear there's going to be more,please make it soon.Thanks for one the best Literotica stories ever, cheers,Malcolm

very good story one of the best i have read

What a great story. I read a lot stories here on Lit. and your's is one of the beat. Looking forward for the the next chapter.

ok yeah.... there needs to be a chapter 2 for this. Quick fast and in a hurry. I loved this very much. :)

Please, finish it. You did one magnificent job. Details were wonderful. It had a storyline that a person could actually fall into and get lost in. Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful.

Typically I don't read stories longer than 2 pages but this one was very good and it caught my interest. So for the love of God please continue the story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This has to bee one of the best stories that I have read in ages. It has all the plot and story line of the old masters of Literature. I should know because I am an English Professor. Kudos and high marks for a well put together piece of lit.

This is well written and enjoyable, especially with a preminition of what the will is going to be.

Greed and avarice will never surpass compassion and understanding.

shouldn't this be in non-consent. Everything in the story says that she is not able to make an informed decision.

You did a wonderfull job on this story. The only thing that would have made it better in my opinion is if you had the lawyer read the will and shown the siblings reactions to the reading. Keep up the excellent work!

Chapter 1 of my story has been viewed in excess of 10,000 times and only recieved 150 votes.

My latest post, chapter 11, has been viewed 1519 times, gotten 33 votes, and 2 comments. I got two feed back emails on it.

All of that effort is wasted if they dont tell us we're doing a good job, bad job, something!

Very good story and I hope you do a chapter 2 to tell how badly screwed his mother is. (the merciless, vindictive bitch!)

more please about life without jen and onwards to more ....

a great ending for that chapter but press on with the next one

Can't wait for chapter 2!

Great to see you back :)

BBE

I really hope you continue this story and these characters. This was really good and can't wait to see what happens next.

Tim's mom is really something else. The other two children don't seem that bad from what we've seen of them so far other then possible wanting money but the grandfather seemed okay with them. I wonder what happen with her to make her get this way.

Would really like to see what happens between Tim and Raven.

you never fail to impress me with your ability to write a really good story. I only can hope that you do continue with this one, even though you have set a really high benchmark.

You really did an amazing job on this story and I hope you continue it. I will be looking forward to the next chapter.

loved this story... id like to read a sequal to this...

I sure would like to be "a fly on the wall" when they read the will!

Great story, please continue.

Bob

This story was well written and actually made you feel good and horny at the same time. My hats off to you, hopefully you will continue this , I can't wait to see what Jen will do!

I just love every story you have writen...

and about the voting, well... dont think they count it if the same ip is vote for a story all the time that one reads it... but i vote for every story i read...

I really think you should continue this story a bit further as the ending was kinda abrupt. Also I'm really glad your back and with a one-two punch of new stories, by the way where have you been anyway?

It's a very good story with a good ending.

I hope you will continue the story and the life of them after the will has been read.

Please continue the story I had enjoyed it so far. I would like to know what happens after the will is read. I would also like to know what the will says also.

Iloved the story great writting. Tell us what the will says and the families reaction.

Please don't leave us hanging. I would like to know whats in the will and more about there life. I give the story 5. you earned it. Thanks

It is a great story. I hope to see you continue it.

All I can say is that I enjoyed the story immensely! I wish I was Tim! I would so like to love her...

My only regret was that you didn't give us the vicarious satisfaction of the family's reaction to the 'revised' will. I know I would have loved that moment!

Great..

No, make that 'fantastic' story. I look forward to additional submissions from your pen.

Good news, part two is going great. You guys have made me feel very, very good. Thank you all.

You have to do one more chapter even though I no what the outcome is going to be.I want to be able to laugh when the bitch Jen get the shaft up the ass.

This story was so different, but wonderful, and the love was so real and well told. It could have used a bit longer ending with Mom and the others getting theirs, but it was still good.

When I started reading this piece, I was immediately pulled in and enjoyed every second of it. I can't wait for an addition to the story. This might actually be my favorite story on Literotica now, lol.

I started reading this before goign to work. I could not stop until I finished it and now I'm late to work. I'll be looking from more stories from you. (hope there are more in the future)

Thnaks for a great story and flaming rememberances of my own aunt.

I'm still in shock at all your guys kind words on my story. This is a first for me. None of my stories have ever gone this well.

There is another waiting to be posted. Write the site, tell them to approve 'Mrs. Sonnet' they take forever anymore. Posting stories from people that don't have a clue on how to write and good stories have to wait a week to be posted. It pisses me off.

say that it's great stuff!

very nice story...but I agree that the situatition screams for closure. most especially for Tim's mother.

Very good story. Certainly needs another chapter. Hope you do that and continue to develop the story line - plenty of options. Would like to suggest that you use spell checker and try to avoid repeating things. Good job

I feel like i'm reading a novel. Great writing, i'm up late, cause I had to finish reading it. Keep up the good work. You should consider writing a book on this story line (I'd buy it). Thanks again.

you hae to finish the story tell of the will and did they have kid,s

like the rest! one( 1 )more chapter. i'd like to here about the mother and sibling and what happens to tim and raven

I loved the story but people are not "that" but are "who".

As with fitting an axe handle - much simpler than writing a complex story, I admit! - enjoy the process of shaping the handle to fit the axe head, don't try to jam the handle in regardless of the shape in which it has to fit.

These comments apply to quite a few other stories of yours, which I have had the pleasure of reading.

When will this one be completed?

pete35

Outstanding writing, the attention to detail places the reader within the subjects body and frame of mind, extremely well done.

I have never read anything better than this story. I am an avid reader of these stories on this and a couple of other sites and this one takes my breath away. I could actually visualize the happenings. With talent this good, you should think of writing short erotic novels. I only wish I could put my real life stories in words so well crafted. Please keep writing these works of art.

I was hoping for one more paragraph. Just to find out what the mother's reaction would be. Heart Attack? Stroke? Fainting? Falling, hitting her head, so she would be in a nursing home. Paralyzed, with only her thoughts, unable to speak? Oh, the possibilities!

Thank you for such an interesting story. Had me Laughing Out Loud(LOL).

This is the best story i have read on this site. Bravo,keep it up!

Dam i hate stories like this leaves you wondering what the hell happen at the reading. You got to put a end to this story. but loved it and keep up the good work lol

I thought it was great. Nice build up, but not too long, good romance, and the characters were developed. The only possible thing that could have made it better was if you had shown the families reaction to the reading of the will. I think it would have ended the story on an even better note than it did. Seeing his mother's reaction would have been great. However, even without that, I thought it was great. Your stories are always well written and good to read. Please keep it up, you're a great author.

Love, passion, justice, and common sense. Wonderful, thanks, I needed that.

dude need to finish it. can't leave everyone on the edge

it is a fantastic story would love to hear more!!!!!!!

Good, well written story, I'm very eager to find out what happens next, please dont leave it there :)

Loved the story. Want to know what happens in the end though. Just one more paragraph would truly end it i think.

I dont know what to say other than Bravo and keep up the good work. you have amazing talent as a writer. and that was one of the greatest endings ive ever read to anything.

I wish I could rate this higher but apparantly it stops at 100.

Truly an inspired piece of art!

More please, this has the making for another chapter

Its truly an amazing story. I can't wait to read continuation of it in the next phase

I can't write a story that long and keep it that good. I loved the romance, the gradual buildup, and the sense of justice. I know what it's like to be waiting for the result of a will... my aunt waited a year for her aunt to die, turned out to get $28,000. She drove us all crazy with her impatience, too. Anyway, excellently written and neatly tied together.

Loved the whole story. I just wish that you had completed it & showed Jen finding out what the grandfather had done with the estate.

coppertopper111@aol.com

Keep writing,

Jerry & Donna

What a beautifully written story - the actual romance of it all was awesome - and it would be good to find out what will happen next - I know that it will be great

What an awesome loving story. Looking forward so much to reading the rest of them.

It was a great story but don't leave us hanging tell us what happens after.

I have read a lot of stories in here but your the best writer i ever read.. you keep me hard for all the story and your doing a great job keep it up..larry

I enjoyed the hell out of it, very good story keep it up!

Very good story, keep up the good work! None of us get enough praise sometimes.

Great story, loved it, only one thing was wrong(even then its not a big thing)- I just wish that you had continued the story long enough for all the bitchy relatives to find out that the estate was going to Raven and Tim, would have loved to read the reaction you put on Jen, but other than that it was a fantastic read. Hope to read more.

Thanks for taking the story in a very different direction. A great statement for love and innocense.

I know this sounds like that of a professor, teacher whatever. However, the main things I can think of are grammatical and spelling errors. I recall maybe one or two short instances of "SDT" (no, for those without some form of education, I'm not taking about STD's). I would love to see a continuation.

I could careless about grammer or spelling, This story was beautiful, Loving, Sad, Exciting, and held my attention the whole way through. The only thing missing, I wanted to hear what the will said in detail, and to find out the reactions of the family to it, exspeacialy Jen, Tims Mother. I do hope there will be a bite more to this story. Either way Wonderful Job. Thank You

Please expand on the story, tell more about what happens to Raven and tim! this is the best story on literotica, please expand on the story!

I LOVED this story, like I do mostly all your others. Only, this story has something a bit more. Great read, 10/10

This is such a wonderful story. it was sad touching and romantic. you did a wonderful job. keep this up

I thought that literotica did not allow rape stories? The situations you describe would be considered statutory rape in most states. Being mentally challenged is the same as a minor as far as the law is concerned.

i loved this story the characters were so indepth i felt like i was tim on more than one occasion ;) i think i am now in love with raven thank you for that very hot story

hiding behind their anonymity. For goodness sake, people, look up the definitions of fiction, literature and most especially EROTICA. (L.A., I hope you read this comment.) This is one of the most beautiful pieces I have ever read. I am not an uneducated man, but I don't have enough superlatives in my command of the English Language to sufficiently express my admiration for what this story conveys. I have never read a better love story in my entire life. Thank you so much for all you do for this site and forgive the damned fools who wouldn't know talent if it kicked them in their asses.

I read this story a good while ago and just read it again, which is rare for me. But, I too, found this to be a very good story and well written. Furthermore I agree with you absolutely about "anonymous" comments. There is really only two things on the site that make my blood boil and that is mindless anonymous comments and Samuelx. One you can't rebut or debate because you don't know who it is and the other does not have the mental capacity to debate. Please continue Mr Wicker.

I really enjoyed this first part but I'd have liked to see it at least through the reading of the Will.

To the person hiding behind anonymous saying this story is rape. First off I work for a non profit organization that helps individuals who are mentally retarded and developmentally disabled. I would classify Raven as borderline MR. There are test given to individuals to see if they can give 'consent.' Just because someone is slower than you doesn't mean they have to live less than you do.

Wicker this was a great story, as always I enjoy your work. I also wish you had continued with the reading of the will. Cause I would have liked to see Jen get her comeuppance. Thanks for the great read.

You need to add some chapters to the story you have just started I think you could a novel here. Go own and show Raven and Tim and how they live and what advetures their life takes. The way you have written the story you could take this very many different ways.

I read this story several months ago and thought it was awesome. Came across several other stories today that you wrote and have been reading one after the other until I came to this one and realized, "Wow...same great author, I should have known!" Keep up the great work!

this is the very first comment that I have written to an author. I never really feel the need to make a comment but this story is very different... I really enjoyed reading it! its so caring and loving and you write very well. BUT the ending killed me! I think you need to write just one more chapter! I would love to hear about jens reactions to the reading of the will and tim and ravens reactions. maybe write about them making love that night and tim comforting her over her fathers death. then maybe do a 3 months later with them on the beach talking about future plans. just a suggestion... cliff hangers drive me crazy :)

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