All Comments on 'Avenging Angels Ch. 00-01'

I'm very curious to read more, and see where this all is heading. I like the set up so far. Good job!

to be a an intriquing story. The initial paragraphs took me a little while to get into but I'm drawn by the almost underscored hint of something 'mythical/spriritual' about to happen. I'd like to see more backstory and emotional details about the characters being introduced. You've left us with a sense of anticipation as we wait to find out how Sam and Cali are like Yin and Yan. Please continue as I feel you'll be weaving an interesting and engaging tale with this submission.

I know it's difficult, but can you please check the "How To" section on Literotica that deals with apostrophies! Better still, buy a book on punctuation and keep it for handy reference. A great story, spoiled for me by inattention to detail, missing out an apostrophe gives a completely different meaning to a word.

i'm weak, couldn't wait, so started reading this tale !

intriguing start to say the least ;-)

Great story written with finess.

djb