All Comments on 'Awakening'

Your paragraphs are too long and with so many words that say very little. Otherwise, good story.

Yes, your paragraphs are long, but I disagree that they say little. I love the descriptions and slow build-up. It's all very well written, and the reader has space to breathe, ponder and feel. Excellent job!

i love how you show how much love he has for his wife =)

Sweet and romantic, but still sexy af