by robin35
A story ruined by monotonous writing and too many grammar & spelling mistakes.
The story was truly awful and it didn't even start very good.
"Babs was sat in the meeting and she was bored to pieces. She had driven three hours to get here this morning and she was straight into a meeting. Her day had been full of meeting after meeting."
Babs was sat? Did someone physically put her there?
Babs was sitting.
"Bored to pieces." Any more clichès?
"She had driven three hours to get here." So you change from past tense to present tense. Why?
She drove three hours to get there.
You need an editor.
Total rubbish.