All Comments on 'Bark at the Moon Ch. 01'

on your first submission. It will be interesting to see where you take the twins. And what is it about the twins that makes them so special? Or is that a secret your not yet ready to tell? I'll be watching for chapter 2.

Its different in a good way I am looking forward to how the story goes from here

thanks for posting!

I like your female lead--strong without being annoying. Really looking forward to reading more. Can't wait for the plot to thicken. I'll be watching for your next post.

Love the setting, (since I live in bay area). Great beginning, looking forward to reading more.

I like the twins from this first impression, but I want to know more about them, Kara in particular. I wonder if she'll end up having a relationship with the mysterious captain? I assume she's not Owen's mate, or he would have reacted. I'm sure the twins paths will cross and they will find out more about their true natures. And of course get into a lot of trouble along the way.

I'm looking forward to finding out more in the next chapter.

like the start of this story and I can't wait for more.

First of all, thanks to everyone for their initial positive feedback. It's great to have so nice a start.

Cantfightfate, don't count anyone out just yet. I've got a good deal stuff planned..and some that isn't quite planned yet.

Chuckles, I'm also a Bay Area native, and I always feel that it doesn't get enough love. So, Bark at the Moon will be a San Francisco story.

Claire, thanks. I love writing female leads. Originally Jason and Kara were supposed to get a 50/50 split, but Kara's turned out to be much more compelling.

MizT, just wait and see. ;)

only complaint, have some form of break when jumping from one place/scene to another, i wonder if the captain is also the person feeding the bliss story to the brother, and they are orphans , wonder if they are not what they seem , just waiting a spark to make it show

Hey, all, just a quick update. Chapter 2 should be finished soon(with some exciting developments)!

Love that this story is set in 'The Bay' I'm local myself and I can just picture the setting as you're telling the story. The salty tang of the air mixed with the scent of wet concrete add a dash of the less savory smell of exhaust fumes. It's great. I'm really digging the whole supernatural CSI spin you have going on here. Keep it up!

-K. Anonymous

Will you tell us what the spell is on the body? I know in ch 2 you still don't. i wonder what he means by the bottom feeder will like it?

So far this story is interesting, and I am looking forward to more. I really like the characters so far. Looking forward to reading more from you.