All Comments on 'Bathroom Adventure Ch. 01'

This is a great first story, especially vivid. Well done!

This was a great story... simple, yet rich.

There was also the pinch of imminent danger looming in that darkened room... adding real excitement to an already highly charged scenario.

Kudos!

totaly hot need to hear more from this girl

You set up an interesting scenario without a lot of words, leading up to an amazingly hot sex scene. Wonderful!

You are very thorough in descriptions and, as others have said, do a decent job of creating atmosphere. The story lacked in other elements -- namely vibrancy. And that often comes with some sort of dialogue to give it life.

It just didn't have that.

ohhh Im enjoying this story. Funny and sexy!!

This was a very good story. Good descriptive words. love the bar bathroom setting. Can's wait to read the rest!