All Comments on 'Beach Tent'

... sweet ... :)

Nice, -can I call it mellow? -story. The characters talked as real people do, also acted that way. Thanks

Well done. A refreshing story of sex between ordinary people that might actually happen.

Who is Maureen?

****Cute read make me want to go out and buy a tent😁 with my luck it will have a hole in it. Good read thanks for sharing

Thank you anon. Maureen is a glitch. she should be Marjorie. I will edit Maureen out after the contest.

Another good story!

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Nice!

I think " . . . Marjorie starred to erect the tent" needs "starTed". One more small thing when you edit.

(Thank you for "It is forecast". I'm seeing "forecasted" a lot lately. Like fingernails on chalkboard. Just BTW.)

(Hmm. I guess I need another metaphor, in this day of whiteboards and markers.)

Since you appreciate edits, there's a stray 'o' in the penultimate paragraph.

Sorry couldn’t follow this mess