by Rhiannon_Nyx
is there going to be anymore? Really started to get into the characters
I think he's possessive and she's complex, very good characters to build on, I wanna know where you're going with it, why he's so captivated by her and needed to capture her. How does he gain her forgiveness. plz write another chapter!
please come back again soon and add more LOTS more chapters would love to see where you go with this.. great story so far..
great, and getting better. i think the first chapter was smoother, in both the tenses and activity, but its enthralling. I'm looking forward to chapter 3, i just hope it won't be months before we see it...
you should find one tense you like writing in and stick to it. The jumping back and forth is a bit jarring.