All Comments on 'Becoming His'

Wow I no this is just a story but that was some fucked up shit!

This story was so well written. The descriptive passages were so realistic that I felt it was happening to me. Would love to read more about their life with the gang.

This reminds me of my own full novel that I am writing about a Drug Lord (Raven Salboni) who is the adopted son of a Drug Lord, Antony Salboni. Raven buys and sells women, and after accidentally killing one, he goes to the police and agrees to work with them in order to catch is own father. He buys a final girl, Kendra, and they end up falling in love. I started writing it in 8th grade, and this is so much like it. Except, Raven is very jealous and would never share Kendra with anyone, except for one character, The Phantom, who is Ravens God Father.

Thanks so much. This is really great.

Part of the story isn't my thing but I loved wondering what a real mafioso would think of this story. LOL ... would be funny to see a dinner party where a mafioso is rattled and very nervous meeting the author ... she's tougher than them!