All Comments on 'Becoming His Ch. 01'

Oh this is such a great story so far! I am really looking forward to reading more !! Thanks so much for posting it!

SOOO HOT! The build up is amazing! Looking forward to Ch2!

this was AMAZING ! i cant wait for chapter two !

can't wait for the next chapter.

Thank you. Great job !!!

Wonderful, I can't wait for the next chapter. There are a few errors that can be distracting, however. Keep writing though, the story line is very easy to follow and so exciting.

Can't wait for chapter 2

This was **fabulous**!! Extremely well written. Can't wait for the next chapter!!

This was really well done. It flowed very well, there was almost no syntax errors (that i remember, anyway). If you didn't have an editor, than I'm that much more impressed. The only thing that I can say negatively is that it was just over the line into the schmaltzy. I realize that it was a romance but (from a male perspective) I couldn't help but feel you went just a tad too mushy (for lack of a better term). Keep up the good work because you are a fine writer.

I really enjoyed this chapter, it was well written unfortunately this is where I’m going to have to leave it. Your story is clearly heading towards a Daddy : Little relationship and that’s a hard no for me. Even the last couple of chapters were difficult for me.

Despite them being very different things references to Age Play, Incest etc for personal reasons it just make my skin crawl. So good luck with your writing, I’m out.

Tess (UK)