All Comments on 'Being Vocal'

nice, sexy...

So very sexy and arousing, you paint the picture so well I feel like i'm there. Amazing!

Do me next!

WOW!!! SOOO HOT!! This should be in the Dom's playbook!!!

The enormous strength of first-person narrative shows clearly in this one-- there is immediacy and intensity. The language is unpolished, but once the reader is accustomed to the narrator's voice, it's an extraordinarily hot story.

Joe, I loved the intimacy of the narrative voice, and the special relationship of the couple, very true and real. Needs just a bit of polish as a piece of 'writing', but very good indeed.

Ain't nothin' better! Good story - had me squirming in my seat. Nicely told, too..

~Honey

Joe, That rocks! Well written...wonderful detail and tension. The roles were well defined and believable.

bravo!

rhino

Great writing Joe, very readable and love the write as you talk approach. Look forward to reading more.

Catalina

You could've easily ended it with 1 page ... but took us on an even more delicious journey. Extremely hot, Joe. Kudos! ~Imp

This would be a fantasy senario for me. Well done, great job xx

Beautiful! Achingly well-written. :)

(WHAT’S WITH ALL THE DOTS???? SOME KIND OF MINIMALIST MORSE CODE????)

was (-/) really(-/) going

arm out that saching (WTF????)

(told me that he was resting her head on) (INCOMPLETE THOUGHT!!!!)

about to the point of she wasn't asleep (HUH???? NONSENSE!!!!)

sexlife (sex life)

g-spot (G-spot) (3)

shudders and grabbed (shuddered)

was the only was it could be thought of (CLUMSILY EXPRESSED!!!! POOR WRITING!!!!)

tip-toes (tiptoes)

get used (to) my cock

amongst a first for her (STILTED, AWKWARD, AMBIGUOUS, AND CONFUSING!!!!)

an orgasms (orgasm)

laying back (lying) (2)

apolstry (upholstery) (THIS MISSPELLING IS SO PATHETIC THAT IT POINTS TO AN ACTUAL AVERSION TO THE PROPER USE OF THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE!!!!)

I tied, tightly, her legs (DISTRESSING WORD ORDER!!!!)

to make it hurt, and pleasure, and simply lack boredom (A TRIUMPH IN NON-COMMUNICATION!!!!)

its (it’s) (2)

you do realize that you are the only one who gives a rat's ass about them don't you? Why can't you just read the story, masturbate like the rest of us and stop your fucking English class?