All Comments on 'Best Laid Plans'

You could have fleshed it out a bit more with the aftermath, could have been an even better story

funny fantasy

good twist to the story - burn them

Another cutie. And you are having fun with these brilliant shorts. Another eight out of five stars.

Good job flipping the papers. Author’s stories always leave you wanting a little more.

Well, plotted, but too short, and with no real ending or conclusion. 3*

Damn, I do wish we could have seen the aftermath of this, since they will all be left with nothing, being 43, hopefully, he can find a good woman and have a proper kid that will respect him, but those years are limited

Some stories just beg for an extended version or a part 2.

Great; and make way for the bitches’ death and #1 son’s near absolute stupidity.

Greed fucks all in an endeavor to defraud or STEAL

This would have been improved further with an epilogue, when at the will reading, the two asswipe kids find out he owned nothing, having given away the company and all assets while he was alive, and they get absolutely no inheritance aside from a penny each (as far as I understand the law, if he creates debt, it won't be passed onto the offspring, otherwise that would have been even better). Even so, 5 stars for a realistic burn.

excellent burn

Cute

kind of dumb until the part about your friend at her Lawyer's office and switching papers and property, money demands. Brillant move.

excellent ending original yet plausible.

Excellent :)

Very good. Says everything that needs to be said and nothing more.

Had so much potential and would need a proper ending

Boink! ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Could have been 5stars

Too short for the theme...in my opinion.

Although theme and story is fantastic

Every so often I do so enjoy a good short story when my time is limited. Yours very well fit the bill and given the brevity do so very well fit the bill. Every one of yours I've read is quite enjoyable. Thank you for taking the time to prepare them for the enjoyment of others.

It would seem that the simpletons among us readers are unable to enjoy a simple little tongue in cheek farce. Why moan about character development when the essence of the protagonists didn't need any development.

All in all an enjoyable short story. Thank you.

Tough audience for this very interesting story.

Nice little 'gotcha!'

@nixrox: Posting a comment to say "no comment" shows a biting wit and an ironic sensibility that i can only envy, but never hope to equal.

This was a very clever idea. Very entertaining. Ignore the simian intellects who can't enjoy a flash.

An incomplete poor end.....awful writing...1 star

no comment and 1 star

Good flash story, although the conversations sounded stilted.

Just another incomplete flash story.

Nice to the point story 5*

Only an ignorant and truly stupid s.o.b. would have asked what you asked.

Great short story. Cut their balls off and leave them to bleed out.

Obviously, to annoy the shit out of you.

And for that, I give this quick, fun, BTB tale 5 stars.

Again, great story about a guy with friends in the right places.

This was rather pointless.

Nice!

HOORAH

Best laid plans, great little story with a happy ending.

Who can pass on these short , concise, stories of delicious revenge.

Very nice and fast, kaboom.5 stars.

Love those plans

Yes plans can get better. I hope he used the heads up to protect his business and remove the liquid assets from his wife's reach BEFORE he screwed with the divorce papers. Had he been really clever he would have changed the papers to give him everything, had her sign them without reading them and then signed them in front of her. THAT would have been clever.

I wasn't expecting too much once the kids showed their true colors, but the ending was delightful! It always helps to have friends.

Liked the story only 2 🌟 as no ending

Their outright treachery was exposed and all the bullshit was eliminated. Very well done. She'll soon be singing, "My boomerang won't come back".

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐....⭐

Another different, but familiar story.

good job

Love how having friends in low places, can do the dirty to the bad guys.

Makes me laugh. Writes about being lazy...take look at sinsational83's profile. Well if anyone knows about lazy ol sinsational83 would. Didn't fill in any field.

I took this story to have same structure as most DD works.

Breif, hardhitting, humorous and the signature ending twist.

I much prefer a work by O'Henry-than Dostoyevsky

He told his story, he gets to say when it’s finished.

‘Nuff Said.

If not exactly likely. TY

It is an unfinished LIFE story. No mention of his birthing, his first kiss,etc. Oh right, those were before this day. OK, there is no mention of stubbing his toe on the coffee table two weeks later, or the promotion he got six months later. Didn't even detail how he passed away quietly in his sleep thirty years later. It is, however, a complete story of a man out-smarting a treacherous family. And a clever tale at that!

Come on, you could do so much more with this story...I'll even edit it for you, might even offer a few suggestion and paths to take....😎

5* for a short with a fun twist!

It said what needed to be said.

Well done.

This was a laid plan for a story, but really it was just a scene.

Finish the fucking thing!!

it is funny how some people cut on writers here about their postings.

amazingly they do not have enough imagination to write their own, but they are qualified to bitch about someone else's work. does anyone else have any thoughts on that?

and it is! So short yet so fully packed. It got 5 well deserved stars from me but I can't help wishing there was a lot more.

great story

if this scenario could happen more than once in a blue moon. TK U MLJ LV NV

without reading any of the other comments I would like to say there could have been a lot more said within this story. But you, like so many other wanna-be authors on this site, either don't have a way to enhance their stories just leave it like this one. This could have been good enough to earn 5 star rating. But due to you ( for whatever reason ) decided to leave it like it is. I wont even give it 3. A 11/2 to a 2 is all its worth. FINISH THE DAMN STORY either by adding another chapter or two and maybe it will get the 5 stars that it could or would get ( from me anyway ). Because from reading this story it appears that you have a talent for writing. You were doing good with this. so please add another chapter and basically finish this one.

but there was so much more to tell and evidently you're just lazy and only told a small part of the story. Even a flash story deserves somewhat of an end. It could have been an easy 5*s. As it is, 2 is the best I can do.

And after the lovers talk, they'll figure out you were responsible for the papers. And then the REAL fight begins, And she gets half of everything. Guess what? You may have won the first skirmish but boy are you about to get screwed in the divorce!

These pauses in your tales betwee 2nd and 3rd gear are getting tiresome.

A real excellent start of a story...BUT...I wanted MORE. Now I know how finishthedamnstory feels when you read a good story and it just stops.

ONLY BECAUSE YOU DIDN'T FINISHTHEDAMNSTORY!

so I do hereby before the queen and subjects give 3 stars

Yet another writer that CAN'T finish what they start!

Where's the rest of it. Yes, it is a good flash story but how much better could it have been? I guess we'll never know. Still...as I said, it was a great flash story so it still get's 5*s from me.

Where is the follow up? I want them destroyed without mercy.

Thank you DD who saves the honor of India alone!

That's what you do to a cheating cunt wife and a selfish ungrateful family. DUMP 'EM.

Ha

Short and sweet and to the point....of the dagger of vengeance!

Yah just gotta love good act of hate,

I love that one - it was fucking priceless -

A true Master Card moment -

You gotta know there will be shit flying at the attorney's office but tough shit - it is unlikely anyone will be caught and the husband wins it all - no one will believe the bitch did not plan it all or the new guy either way even the court will be pissed.

Another great tale from DD! Short, sweet (revenge), and to the point!

5 Big Stars!

You just keep rolling grenades into relationships. I like it!

I really like your BTB shorts!

Thanks for the offering.

Great flash story -- sad to think he could be married so long and not realize what kind of wife and children he had. Also, sad to think he could cut both his children out of his life so easily. Sad to all concerned.

a bit of information is a wounderful thing....

Fantastic story but way too short. I highly recommend this story for all the cucks out there to see how a real man responds. As always I am sad for giving it a 5 because that's the maximum I was allowed.

This was way too short. Great, but short. How about a sequel.

Its always good to know where people stand at.

bill

nice way to get rid of a fucked up family.

Introduction, problem resolution

There is nothing more that need be said. I don't need to read 5 pages of their fucking college relationship. Married, she wants out because she's a cheating woman, and he messes up her plan because of a PLAUSIBLE coincidence. It could happen, so I give the benefit of the doubt.

Nicely written and thank you

What is left to finish? He is not reconciling and the three fools will be in conflict for some time. That is a resolution right there. If you want to know what happened between Bob's wife and her lover - who cares? The protagonist of this story was Bob and this chapter of his life is over at the end of the story - end of story!!

and never finished

Loved it - Five Stars!

maybe not,but doubleDD made it possible and humurous. TK U MLJ LV NV

But still good enough for 3***.

.....after being invested in a brilliant mind a soul searching loving wives story earlier....you've made my day....HELL!!! you've restored my love for twisted happy endings.....brilliant story mate....

I had a really good snicker at the end of this one. Thanks for the read. Jim

Nice touch. She's gone and without her lover and the kids lost 1 parent. The divorce settlement will have a definite tip against her. The remaining parent has minimal value to them. Amazing what someone can do with a little information. I liked it.

Funny story. Ignore the anonymous twits.

Why those people don't commit themselves to the asylum???

Third time reading it still like it. Love the little twists. Keep up the great work.

Nice touch with the turn around but a truly empty and nonfulfilling storyb finish it off for us

Just about the stupidest thing I have ever read out here! No wait...

I think I'm getting hard!

Nope! Just gas.

Top marks Mr DD. The ending caught me, and I fell of my chairs laughing

It's just a clever vignette folks. Don't look for Poirot to figure it out. Just enjoy the little smile at the end.