All Comments on 'Betrayed'

I liked the read. Interesting story, interesting girl. I'd like to see a sequel to this.

This screams for the next chapter. Well written in every way. Flow between narrative and dialogue was smooth, story development increased in interest as it progressed, with the end moving rapidly to the climax. Good stuff.

You should consider a follow-up to tell how everything . Changed for everyone Mom,Dad, Mr Andrew, Ms Cecilia & esp. Ruth

the mouse bites back:)

Now this I liked. Good work and thanks for posting it.

And what a great ending.

He must have a fascinating internal dialogue. I can see where he was transferring guilt to his wife and daughter to relieve his inner turmoil!

A scorned female ain't no joke. I knew Andrew's ass was keeping secrets.

I gotta agree with the commentator's acclaim for the clever weaving of this tale by Cromagnonman.

Congrats from Anthropophagicman

Lmao... Loved it

I love putting the pin in over stuffed hypocritical wind bags -

Can't wait to see what depravity Daddy comes up with. I could see him trying to,rape her to punish her for falling from his religious grace.

Interesting first chapter I love the storyline. Good read. Thanks for sharing.

I loved everything about this story. It's nice to see women who find beauty in themselves.

I can't wait to read the next two chapters, and if something terribly sinister was to happen, that would be entertaining as well.

A very apropos bad priest ;-)