by TheLastNavigator
Good writing with the exception of using the English language's stumbling blocks of: their, there, they're, your, you're, to and too. I would suggest an editor or a quick review of a textbook and your writing will become excellent instead of great! Thank you for sharing your stories. I normally sign in for any comments to the author but the program wouldn't let me. Orefinn
I hate love triangles! They always have a bitterness to it, since one of the three involved always ends up getting hurt. Your writing is exquisite tough, and the storyline very inventive, though unrealistic.
You really need to learn the difference between YOUR and YOU'RE. I think I only saw you're once or twice when it should have been used the majority of the times you used your.
I've submitted chapter 3, I hope you guys enjoy
Definitely got my attention ready for the next installment! Big question who do I like more J.D or Johnny?
I like them both!!! Rarely does that happen! So excited to see where you take this!
I like them both for her..as of right now. Need an update!!!!
its been almost nine months sense you typed a new chapter i need to know what going to happen next plleeeaaassseeee!!!!!
I know an update is somewhere in the wind because this is working!!!!!
Don't make us hold our breaths......you have a really good story building.
Soon, dahlin' .....soon.
O really Hope you done a lot of chapters, how long it's taking you to update I want five more chapter next update please I am fixated on how good it's getting and it only the second chapter.so please more... I'll do anything you want "wink"
I am enjoying your story and am happy I stumbled across it. I'm really looking forward to reading more.
Don't forget about us!
please continue. Hope you don't leave it at this. Story is smoking
I have thoroughly enjoyed this. I love the way you have built the characters as well as the evolving chemistry between them. Can't wait for the next chapter..
Just started reading this a few minutes ago and I'm liking it so far so I do hope you will be updating it soon its getting very interesting and I can't wait to see what happens next thanks!!
for more chapter real soon i so cant wait and i just hope you dont give up on this story i already love it please continue thanks
I C WERE U GOING WIT THIS SO CAN WE GET MORE N WAT ABOUT A 3SUM I JUST LOVE IT SO DO STOP THERE
i looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooove this! please continue sooon!
Johnny and J.D.
Who will she choose?
Can't wait for the story to unfold!
Great read!
I am thoroughly entertained by this interracial tug-of-war. Who's going to win the illustrious prize?
Too bad for Johnny. He had so many years of golden opportunities and now he's lost them. JD is here and about to take charge.
Thats what I'm Talkin bout baby!
hurry this process please It's so Juicy!
I need more!
Bring it!
woot woot!
this is a really cute story and I can't wait to see the love triangle.
*****
loving the story so far. I know its early but I want er to end up with Johnny
SUPLIME
Great writing and awesome storyline. Love the plot and looking forward to more of same in future chapters and other of your stories, too. Keep them coming!
I love the tone, tension, and possibilities of this story. A very retro feel with modern overtones. I am definitely looking forward to the next installment.
Damn double damn I don't see this ending well at all, so good next chapter please.
That was the best... the tension between Johnny & J.D...OMG I can't wait til' the next chapter comes out. Two men that want her and she wants them both also.... This story is going to be one of the EPIC ones. I can just feel it. Awsome!
Just found this story today and I'm already wishing it was finished. Amazing job. Very interesting and intriguing :)
Fantastic story.
I really want Johnny to be with Lou, even though I'm feeling JD.