All Comments on 'Between You and I Ch. 01'

by belleinconnue

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Needs more

The scene is nicely depicted, but it feels like just that; a scene removed from the whole. Call me old fashioned but I'd like a little sense of build-up before going straight to the sex. I want to see a bit of the characters' normal side before they get dirty.

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