All Comments on 'Bible Camp Babysitter - Day 03'

Love the intense emotion involved here! Awesome (in the true sense of the word) chapter!

Words escape me! Suffice to say, I added this story to my favorites and added you to my favorite authors! Great read, gave it a 5!!!!

I appreciate the comments! I will continue to work on improving. Glad y'all have liked it so far :)

Care and compassion found! Not to be trifled with. Beautiful descriptive and captivating stories. Personal experience or fantasy, whatever the inspiration, the emotional honesty shines through and I thank you for that.

But I do have a couple of nit-picky things to comment on. First, the dialog is, well, a little overly philosophical for a teenager and a regular guy. I get it, but I think perhaps they could say the same things a little less technically. Second, and this one has bugged me with a lot of stories, the word "discrete" means separate and distinct. The spelling you're looking for is "discreet," which mean careful with one's speech and behavior. I blame spellcheck.

Much too technical for a girl of 19 - they don't speak nor act in these manners. Almost like a medical exam at times in this chapter.

only rated it a four star after all the previous were a five star

Good job trying to explain extreme pleasure and trying to give someone else extreme pleasure through gentle loving touch slowly all over there body. I do that with my wife for as long as she’ll let me as I love to touch her as much as she likes to be touched.