All Comments on 'Black Fantasy Fulfilled Three Times'

try using the first person tense....it's much easier to follow....otherwise..as good story...keep going

I like your enthusiasm but suggest you have an editor look over any future stories first because I think you were so excited you got sloppy in more ways than the obvious. There are countless sentences that seem to be missing a word or two or where the tense changes in mid-stream, making it a difficult read. There are also many run-on sentences that sound like somebody trying to tell a story without taking a breath.

Swimsuit instead of swim suite/ without instead of with out/slid instead of slide/forever instead of for ever, just for spelling starters. Dialogue always needs quotation marks to set it apart from the story.

I don't say any of this trying to be mean, and there will be people telling you to ignore comments like this and just keep writing. They aren't doing you any favors. If you don't want to get an editor there is another way to improve. Read the story aloud to your partner. Read it just the way you wrote it and many of the problems will become obvious to you. Here's an example of one of your sentences:

"As the first one pulled out the next mounted me and since I was loosened up he began to pump wildly and like the first it felt great I was cumming constantly wave after wave after what seemed like for ever he began to pump his cum in my pussy."

See? That's a paragraph in need of a couple of commas at least and maybe a period as well. I wish you well in future efforts.

needs some English correction for sure , bur it sounds true and I have experienced a similar situation and I do love black cock I only had two

in my wild time with them and I love to see them every time I can now

so hot

my wife and I had the same fantasy and we live it out now just like

this woman and we really like it, when she meets alone with her black bulls she allways calls and tell me and take pic and fills me in when she gets to see me so hot and I love to be with her also and help satisfy our black bulls

Don't pay any attention to the haters at all. Please keep telling us about your experiences with BBC. Most of us are very interested.

yes tell lus more good story , turned me on

I have read the comments and glad most of you liked what I shared. The story is true and will write more when I have time. I will try to do a better job at writing the next one.

very well scrip, yes it has become in north America the ultimate fantasies of sexual & orgys of our time,. the best of the best

very well done you got your point across keep writing I think every story will get better

I love both your stories. I love this and enjoyed jerking off to them keep on writing more of your true stories

HotWildCat, keep writing!! Don't let the racist, hateful wimp who posts "Anonymouse", LOL, stop you!!

You are very strong.

I am a white man. Black men do a much better job in appreciating white women.

Keep up your great writing !

As a married white boy I honestly believe that Black men are Superior in the bedroom. We white boys simply can't compete. Love your stories. I'd lie to read that a muscular Black man forces hubby to watch and luck up his cum.

My wife loves a black cock. She works in a store run by black lads and each one as her each week and some times four times a day her pussy. Is always dripping with cum when she gets home I get sloppy 5ths most days. She says they have at least 12inches each one of them. And she won't stop having them all.

Being a black man, single (never married), tall - 6'7", in shape business owner, I have made it my life's quest to make white women very, very happy. So far at age 38 I can honestly say I must be doing something right as they continue to come back for more. Single, married, engaged, separated even widowed cannot get enough of my 10" black cock! No wonder my nick name in college was "meat whistle".

A VERY DETAIL THAT EXPRESS THE REALITY OF OUR HUMANITY FOR ALL OUR REPRODUCTIVE ORGANDS,.

As a married white male I have no idea why but I dream of my little white wife taking a huge black cock. She is five feet tall with long blonde hair and at 47 still turns heads. When I married her I would have never dreamt of sharing her, but now it's all I dream of. Especially with a well hung black guy. I would love to have her come home one day and she tells me a story like this.

a little light on details but hot none the less! Thank you and keep the stories coming!

Cheers!

I think every white woman should experience a big black juicy dick!

Or more ! What a wonderful fantasy you've put in my head, and p.... !

I liked your story line but you are in desperate need of an editor. Keep writing

if your ways of spicing things up in the bedroom include bringing in other people then your doing it wrong

This story is still good the second time around. This gal needs to go off of birth control then get herself bred black not once but twice as all white girls/women should do.

WEN CAN YOU GET YOUR BLACK MATES TO CUM AND FUCK ME LIKE THIS JIM AS WEN EVER YOU LIKE MY HUBBY SAY GAIL37D

You sound more like a man writing this

This black man fantasy is getting a bit boring now. Not all black men are well endowed and not all black men are good in bed. Some of the kinkiest stuff is done by white dudes. Maybe the next story should be a black woman being ravaged by three white guys non stop. Even the odds hey?

I love to here more about that I'm trying to get my wife to try some any suggestions on how to get her to do it jamesvernon2847@gmail.com like to hear back from you

Hot story. After 5 years of marriage, I found out my hubby was balling his young assistant at work for a few years, and I discovered BBC. I met a very tall black man, 10 years older than me, he was very pleasant, made me laugh and relax, so I decided to go back to his place figuring he wanted to fuck me. He had a solid, thick 8" and he certainly could fuck, wow, he bent me over and shoved into my pussy, there was no escape, his giant hands held me in place as he kept pumping away all the while asking, "how to you feel white girl?" Me:"oh it hurts, OMG, you're too fucking big, please, WTG etc." Nope, he fucked me for a good 30 minutes and came in me. He was spent, pulled out and slumped onto me. His cum dribbled out of my pussy. An hour later, he started fucking me missionary and finished with my white sticky legs on his broad black shoulders as his cum flooded my pussy. I had been blacked for sure and I liked it. We went to sleep afterwards. We fucked the whole weekend. I missed a few days of pills and was lucky not to get knocked up.