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Member: "transverse" wrote you a very thoughtful comment to help you a few days ago. I hope you contact him and seek his offered help. Here is his prior statement to you: I've read some of your work as well as the comments that people have written about it. I realize that people on here can be somewhat cruel and usually don't provide any reasoning behind their opinions, but I understand some of their frustrations. Though it might seem so, most of these people are not averse to your message of black empowerment. It's your style and some of the other messages you are sending that they find so offensive. Your beginnings tend to read like personals ads, for a start. This is okay for one or two stories, but for more than that it becomes repetitive and makes it seem like you don't dedicate time or effort to your work. Since your black empowerment theme is so important to you, I know you put a lot of thought into your work, and it should reflect that, but it doesn't. Also, this is an erotic story site. People don't want to come here and hear a rant about the horrible state of the world- they came for an erotic story, and maybe some background to keep it interesting. Its a good idea to keep with your theme of black empowerment and positivity, but your focus should be on the erotica and you should work in your message through dialogue, during characterization, or through the events of the story. Also, try a point of view other than first person.Let your characters live apart from you. You'd be surprised at what this can do for the readers' perception of you as the author. Last, but certainly not least, is the tone. I think this is probably the biggest problem you are facing right now. Your voice is too strong in your stories, and your characters don't have room to exist. Even though the characters in all of your stories are supposed to be different people, they all sound exactly the same. Their overall attitude is extremely condescending and self righteous, character flaws you routinely condemn. Your characterization of women is especially offensive and oversimplified, and you often overlook the explanations behind their behavior. I hope this helps you to look below the surface of the comments you are getting and see their true meaning. They can be very hurtful- I know, I've gotten a few- but in the long run, they'll prove more valuable than the ones that praise you because they reveal flaws that you might not otherwise see. Please feel free to contact me, I would really love to collaborate with you on a work so that people could actually receive the message you are trying to send.

But SamX always ignored it and went on writing the same stuff the same old way. The advice from "Transverse" is spot on. I could not have have said it any better. Samuelx, you really should contact transverse and let him help you.

twat!

points for the slight change in perspective(25)-BONUS POINTS for having the balls to admit you're from Brocton! Aren't you the lucky fella!Pistolpackinpete

sam x, are you really writing erotica or are just trying to piss people off?

I believe you hit it right on the nail. However, you're most likely speaking to a kid or someone whose life is reaching an age where he's too old and bitter to change.

Either way, no one really cares; as you said, this is an erotic site as well as myself and others suggested he should get a blog. Oh well...

Since his writings are all of the same shit different doo-doo type of style, and he's obvious not open to opinions, perhaps we all should just ignore him.