All Comments on 'Blood Moon: Malachi's Story Ch. 02'

to short

I'm glad you're writing again and would love to see longer chapters. Pay attention to proofreading though since similar sounding, but incorrect words like the following distract from the story:

Use Definitely, not defiantly.

Quiet, not quite.

Accept, not except

More??

I enjoyed the chapter. I too would have liked it to be a bit longer and there is some editing to be done but the story itself is good. I like how clear you made it that he isn't interested in more from her. That he still wants to steal Kyrin (the cad!) and that she is a warrior which is not what he wants in a wife. It makes it all the more intriguing as to how he'll end up loving her. I hope you build it up slowly and make it little things and not just one thing that happens and poof! he's in love with her. Try to make it believable. I look forward to seeing her catch his heart. Bring us more soon!

There is just never enough for me! It's good!

I am so glad you started this section of your strories. Please continue with it till the end

There are two words that are constantly mixed up, on this site and on many others. It's becoming a pet peeve.

Please check the definitions for:

defiantly: characterized by defiance; boldly resistant or challenging: a defiant attitude.

Origin:

1830–40; < French défiant, Old French, present participle of defier to defy; see -ant

—Synonyms

insubordinate, contumacious, refractory, recalcitrant, rebellious, insolent; daring.

—Antonyms

obedient.

definitely: –adverb

1. in a definite manner; unambiguously.

2. unequivocally; positively.

–interjection

3. (used to express complete agreement or strong affirmation): Are you starting your diet tomorrow? Definitely!

Origin:

1575–85; definite + -ly

—Synonyms

1. See clearly. 2. absolutely, certainly.

I have waited to see if I liked your story and I do. I hope that you will be adding more to this story line. there are about 27 more people to write about. Please keep it going.