All Comments on 'Blue Prints'

This is really good (in my opinion) but there are a few things I'd change. Like why is she being punished? I always love to know why a person's being punished. ;) And what do they look like? I also would say that you should give them actual statements in quotes like, for example, "words being said" person said (clever right?). It's short, in other words, which isn't a bad thing. This really turned me on though and I like the sentence- "You did this to your little whore, your personal sex toy" the best. =) It was a great first story!