All Comments on 'Break Up Joy'

Please keep writing.It is a fine story

Very well written story. A lot of information yet a lot left to ones imagination. Would certainly enjoy a follow up, but that is up to you. Interesting style that would seem to promise more from you. Keep writing and posting! -Kevin

First, the idea that two young women, NEITHER of whom had had ANY lesbian thoughts would fall into this relationship defies credulity. Now, if you said that Lisa was at least bi-curious it would start to make sense.

And you said the had been together 5 years, since freshman high school. This would make them probably college freshmen, at most sophomores, highly unlikely he would be captain of the football team.

Finally, "Even after five years, Sarah was still as beautiful as ever." She's only 20 at the most! You act like she should be thinking about a face lift!

Thanks guys! And He WAS a football captain at high school when they WENT to high school. Just saying. And this was my first story, I'll think of writing more! :D