All Comments on 'Brenda & Ian Ch. 03'

I must agree with some of the previous comments concerning how well written and what an emotional rollercoaster the reader rides going through this series. I like some others agree that bringing Jesse into the epilogue would have been a nice touch but it was a very good read.

What about Jesse's mom?

Second reading and still so very enjoyable. Hall of fame worthy.

This is such a wonderful love story. Reading the series was an emotional journey for me. Sorrow, sadness, happiness and joy. Thank you for the time and effort you gave to writing it.

This is a wonderful series, and some of its content hit really close to home.

However, I'm not very enthusiastic about some aspects of part 3. I share the thoughts and opinions Ambivalence has layed out in his comment.

I just might add that Ian should have been more respectful to Brenda's opinion regarding his dad. If meeting with him at all, the first time at least it should have taken place in public and without Brenda. Also, I wouldn't have made Ian loose his temper that badly when he hit his dad. I would have come to my senses after the first couple of blows. The fact that Ian couldn't stop himself dampens my optimism a bit regarding the couple's happily ever after.

Wonderful story. 5/5

Marvellous story !

In vino veritas...

A bit confusing about Adrian when you consider the things he thought about his wife while drinking in his office...

The only thing that would have made sense is if it turned out he had a brain tumor... otherwise, his thoughts while drinking don't jibe with his thoughts while presumably sober.

And I don't really see Ian being willing to meet his father on his father's home turf. I see that as most likely being a neutral ground kind of meeting or not at all.

Goodness me what a wonderful love story. I hope your eyes were leaking as you wrote this because mine certainly were as I read it. So very real in terms of the emotions you portrayed among family members when true love is involved. Thank you so much for writing such a wonderful story. You are a gifted writer and I hope you continue to write for us here.

I enjoyed it.

They had a hard time but it turned out great the way it should thank you

Story well written and a pleasant change from the cousin with a huge cock or nympho mother on the loose, a great tale of true love overcoming obstacles of everyday life.

thank you. a very moving story of love and life as it can sometimes be. A great read I really enjoyed it.

This is such a moving tale of love, life and family. You're characters were so real. I found myself spinning through so many emotions. Joy, frustration, sadness, anger, hope....so many. It brought back my memories of losing my own parents. I can completely understand the grief. You were able to convey in such a deep and touching heartfelt way.

My only piece of advice is.... If you are not published already .. You should be. You have a rare gift. It would be a shame not to share you abilities with the world. There so much that one can learn from the tasteful and romantic way to told this tale.

In short AMAZING!

Great job! That is all i can say with all the tears in mu eyes right now.

This was the 3rd time reading this and it still gets to me. Great work.

This story belongs in the Romance category. It is a surpurb love story. It is sad that this very good author had not posted a story since 2009.

IMHO, this series, with the possible exception of the first part, should be in the Romance category.

Outstanding story, well-rounded main characters! Ian's father was maybe a bit too much "businessman" for most of the series, but almost everyone knows someone who is "too much" something.

I like the way Tony155 writes!

I must have read a couple of hundred stories on here over time, but of all those that I've read this has to be the best of them all.

Just congratulations on a really great story, well worth 10 stars if it were possible !

Thanks !

This story should not be in the Taboo/Incest category at all. Also this story is very PG rated IMO, and that was a real downer as well. Honestly, this was a waste of my time and i kept waiting for the HOT and descriptive sex scenes to be drawn out, but that didn't happen. I don't know why this story has such high star's, b/c it wasn't incest, the love making scenes were boring as hell. Waste of my time. If I wanted to read this story I would have went to the dull and boring section. Good story, but it's not dripping with descriptive love making, let alone fucking sequences. I gave this 4 stars and I honestly don't know why. I didn't like it. Not my cup of tea.

I've always loved this particular series, hence the reason you're name is in my favorite author's list. Thank you for the stories you've written and also the ones that are hopefully still yet to come. (Hint?...lol) As far as all of the jackasses who insist on leaving negative comments are concerned, know this. For those one who had the guts to at least leave their names, I salute them. However, until someone has written and submitted their stories for others to read and/or criticize; they have NO RIGHT to speak ill of other people's work. As far as you're concerned Tony155. please keep on keepin on and never stop giving us wonderful tales such as these to read...Thanks Again, my friend...MP

Sad,tearful and exhilarating rollercoaster ride.Very well written! RealizineLooking forward to reading more of your work.Thank you !

I do, however, agree that it could only have been even more beautiful, had the second and third chapters been more fully developed.

My first TONY155 story. Given your talent and style, I will now return to your submissions list for my next read. And the next. And the next.........

I still stand by my comment after reading the first chapter. I hope you can take this writing skill and apply it to a more happy, upbeat story. Would certainly be something.

This was a well writing story. It just spent so much time in a depressing state.

this was a story that had me hooked from chapter one. Very well written, and possibly the best story I have ever read on this site. It had everything a story should have. I will be reading more of your stories.

I loved it. From the beginning to the end . Maybe short but really well written keep it up :)

Congratulations! Your story concluded on a high note and a clear denouement. With a little editing -- going back to Chapter One -- this could be one of the greats. Some, if not most, readers will say, "just tell the story, don't worry about the grammar and specific word choice." Obviously you have accumulated the five-star ratings, I think you have a greater talent that deserves to be supported with good proofreading and editing. Chapter Three needs attention to POV shifts and verb-case agreement to keep the reader firmly in the suspended disbelief I call the fictive dream. All-in-all,

I enjoyed your story. Thanks for sharing.

each chapter kept getting more and more rushed. these three chapters should have been spread out over five or six chapters. there should have been more time between her parents dying and them getting together and more time between when they were thrown out of the house and them forgiving the father. you totally glossed over a lot of details in your rush to finish.

oldman77, I has hoping that it wasn't just me. I recently turned 60 and have noticed the same thing.

For me, this was/is the perfect storyline; just the right amount of intrigue and sensuality. I ignored several of my normal TV programs in order to read this story nonstop. I did, momentarily, get the feeling Brenda was going to turn into a control freak; glad it did not go there. I, as I suspect others can, identified with the abusive, self centered parents. The reconciliation was a good ending. I sure hope Tony155 has some more good reading material to share.

The total story is just awesome!

George in Omaha

Threads : the island still dtands as the best but this story has a close followup ! A very good storyline considering one heck of an emotionally addictive story !

Have been reading stories on "Literotica.com", a short time. Of all the ones I have read, this is probably the best one. A very emotional story, with great love between Brenda & Ian, and there was great love between Brenda and her parents. It would be nice to have more chapters pertaining to the birth of their child and their relationship involving Ian's mom....Since I have become a senior citizen I really become emotional

reading stories like this. Thank you for a great story, and look forward to reading more...... oldman77

The best story I've ever read! Please please please keep it up! Don't stop! I'm eagerly waiting for the next chapter...!

This was my second time reading this marvelous tale of true love. You have shown everyone what true live is capable of doing things that we can believe in. I wish it could keep going though. Ian and Brenda still have his mother (I hope). But either way it is a masterpiece of romantic love and romance. Keep it up don't settle for anything less than what you have created. You keep putting out stories like this and I will keep reading them. I helped my heart and soul to know that true love is out there. We just need to find it and believe.

This series that you have done is amazing. This is romantic novel material. All three chapters were captivating. It wasn't like the other incest stories on here it was a great love story and so deep into everything around Brenda and Ian. Keep it up. :)

You are just truly amazing.I just think that if the ending was stretched a bit longer, reader would have had more time to flow with the emotion. But anyway one of the best story on the site.

TRULY AMAZING WRITER!!!!!!!!!

I felt like I was actually there. The imagery and context were fantastic and very, very moving

Great job!

spellbinding

It was as if you were watching Ian and Brenda first hand...i was drawn into the vivid moments from start to finish. This work is a masterpiece. A very rare gem of a tale. I sincerely hope that the author will write more masterpieces such as this.

The bar has been placed high for other writers.

I love the Brenda and Ian series, very grown up which you never see on this site *rolls eyes.*

I loved from start to finish, I hope you'll be writing more of them though, I just simply love it.

Please tell me there will be more. This is one of the most touching and heartfelt stories I have ever read, I have re-read this story about ten times already.

Until I read all 3 chapters. This is a very well written story about people who are not cartoon fantasy beings. Please keep writing.

A grownup story for grownups! RARE on this site. Beautifully written & paced. No overlarge sex organs, male or female, or "supermodel" sisters, moms, cousins or aunts. REFRESHING to say the least. They came across as REAL people & I thank you for writing this.

To many stories on this site apprear to be written by 16 year olds with a mammary fetish.....just sayin'

This has to be the best story that I've read on this site it was a great love story I will more than likely read it again

This is one of if not the best story on this site. This is the fourth time that I have read it. This is all about love and not just sex. To me these are the best types of stories to read and I thank you for writing it. Definitely 5 stars.

Great series... Great plot... It was erotic... And captivating... Fantastic read... Kept me wanting to read more... Highly Recommended

This was as good as the last chapters. I'm happy it ended well for Ian and Brenda (if bitter sweet- not a complaint!) and am sorry it's finished now. Lovely, lovely story! Thanks for writing.

@Anonymous if you read the epilogue at the end of the story u find out ians father had cancer and died before his grandchild was born.

I loved your stories and would like to know if a sequel is in the works because at the end of this story we were left at a cliffhanger. Does Ian resolve the problems with his father? Do Ian and Brenda have children?

Thank You for your Wonderful stories.

I have read your every story many times....this is the seventh time I am reading this story and I still found it fantastic,lovely,beautiful,entertaining and heart-warming....I just want to say you are a amazing writer and thus would enjoy more stories coming from you in future....thankyou....

Long, but beautiful story. Really a great, moving love story and we got to see Ian and Brenda develop over a span of time. I imagine Ian has allowed his crew cut to grow out, and that in time, Ian has grown a dusting of dark blond hair between his pecs, and maybe even a treasure trail leading from his abs into the pubic bush.

This was a great series. Glad to have found it and you.

You are a terrific writer, once I started this story I couldn't put it down

Simply put, it's beautiful.

i want to thank you for writing this. i gave every chapter 5* and the personal meaning it meant for me deserves 10+* thank you

I have been reading stories on this website for over two years. I was caught up in this story four chapters into it. It felt familiar like I've read it before but I know I hadn't.

Your pacing was excellent your usual dialogue was very good.

While this site is full of writers, you are an author please publish!!

SCHUPPINZIGH

Tony, I can't add much of a comment that hasn't been mentioned before. I only want to say thank you for sharing it with us. At times I wondered how much of this story is based in actual events in your life or of someone very close to you. Again thank you and I am off to read the rest of your work.

So well done..you make us miss them !!!!

A great story try submiting some to get published.

This series was fantastic and full of heart. I really do appreciate the hard work the author put into this story.

Best story that I've read on this site. Truly an excellent job of writing, this is the way all stories should be. Props to you, sir, and keep up the good work!

Goodness me!!what a fabulous story.Its just one those rare fine stories that i have ever read.I just feel that attached to the story that after finishing reading this story,I feel like heart-broken.

Even if the protagonists were real first cousins such marriages are legal in over 20 states of the US and once done in those states they are accepted as legal in all the states.

In Europe first cousin marriages are legal in all the countries there and recognized legal in the USA just like all foreign marriages.

The old wives tales about deformed children the truth is that the risk is not much higher than in non related parents. Even in case of brothers and sisters this is true unless incest is continued over several generations.

In some European countries incest of any form among adults is no longer illegal unless there are children produced like between parents and sons or daughters or brothers and sisters. I have no idea how the authorities propose to enforce it

I have never commented on a Literotica story before. So this story must be truly great for me to be writing this. The raw emotion blended within the words of this story is unbelievable. The power of the sequence of events is breathtaking. I am an avid reader and i can honestly say not many stories have ever touched me in the way this has. Truly powerful writer this author is and please write more stories like this. Thank you.

I never expected a story on literotica to elicit anywhere near the range of emotions as from what I experienced from reading your story. Truly great and one I'm sure I'll read again. Bravo.

.........Thank you.

Such a great story, the truthful relationship between Brenda and Ian, the realistic conflict between Ian and his father. Everything about this story is great. I thank you.

Like most readers, I suspect, I read Literotica not for this kind of writing, indeed it was only by chance that I encountered the story. Isn't chance wonderful? I doubt very much that I will ever read a story this good again on Literotica, and it would be hard to find stories of this quality anywhere. The author is to be thoroughly congratulated for what can only be described as a truly masterful work Thankyou, thankyou, thankyou! And, as another commentator has said, PLEASE write a full book!!

It's hard to add any more to what I wrote after Chapter 02. This is a heart-breakingly beautiful story. The characterization, the pacing, the emotional impact, the realism of the Adrian-Ian conflict, everything.

It was also cathartic for me.

Tears in my eyes! Stunning piece of work... words cannot describe how much this story meant to me!

This was a very good series not what i expected i loved more for the actually story you should really consider being a romance author because this story was literally one of the best i have ever read it touched me and i actually cried thank you for amstory i will never forget you are just brilliant simply brilliant best writer on the site and this is a long comment because i cant get over how perfect down to every single detail this story was i LOVED it, im sad that i finished it though it was that good

Wow! As many others have said, this is not what I expected when I first clicked on part 1; but I can easily say, this is one of the best stories I've ever read - of any genre.

Others have suggested you should write a book - I can only echo them.

Bravo!

This was a very good story.

Thank you for your great story. Felt like I was living it rather than reading it. Look forward to more from you.

Amazing series! Hope to see many more from you!

MAGNIFICENT!!!!

Just great.... Like all of your stories I've read... But I think you should sort of continue the series but with their children.

I loved all three of the chapters of this tale...thank you

I agree with them. I also cried through this story. Its a bit hard to admit since im a grown as man but I couldn't help it. Shit, I don't even think I cried as much when I had to put my dog down a month ago. To be quite honest i'm slightly suprized this was writen by a male. All I gotta say is keep on writing like this, and bring on the tears.

I've read many stories ... but this is the one story that stayed in my mind ever since i first read it ... Tony , you really are a truly gifted writer ... this was the one story which made tears welling in my eyes throughout the series ... damn it ... i liked it a lot ... hope you'll write many such fine stories for us (especially me)to read ... hope for the best ... Great God , you're good at writing these stories ...

That was by far oner of the best short stories I've ever read and you have to write a sequel or something please.

I usually don't cry through movies/stories but this one touched me. Really gifted writer. Would like a sequel of maybe there children etc.

this is the most amazing story ever i loved it and constantly wanted more!!!!!!!!!!

I, like most people, come here for various entertainment purposes. What i thought would start off as another hot sexy story, turned into a story that had me wanting more. not something i see often here. You have an amazing grasp of emotion, and a knack for story telling. Truly a great story about love and how important it is in our lives. thank you for writing it.

How can this be? I'm a pretty tough guy, but why are there tears in my eyes? I have to admit that I cried several times throughout this series.

You truly are a gifted writer.

You really are a Bastard I cried all the time while reading this.

The pain from when her parents died.

The pain of the love she found in her cousin.

The pain the other parents where.

The pain of coming to the end off this great story and not finding another chapter.

Tony, if you ever stop writing, I'ld have to hunt you down... I literally could not stop reading this story until its very end... I have never read a story with so much en depth characterization, and true to life feel to it in all the years that I have been reading... And I'm not just talking about erotica... I'm talking about any kind of reading... VERY, VERY WELL DONE... And A Heartfelt Thank You...

Some HOT SEX wraps up this romance -- but with enraged violence from Ian's father, who descends into alcoholic Hell before climbing back into family relationships and slowly gaining forgiveness. He's too late and soon dies of cancer. Ian's mom is the only grandparent Ian and Bren's children will ever know (my personal experience). The lovers and their marriage will be just fine, especially because of the playful, joking aspects of their joyous love. Tony, you have written a marvel of a tale!

super story man this wasent like a fiction it was real enough and u just mixed the right amount of story and sex together very good dude

You should really shop this story around to some agents. With a little tweaking this could make a great movie of the week or even something for the big screen. Love your style and the way you tell a story. This would even make great novel material.

good but the part where they are asked to forgive him is unrealistic no way would ian or brenda go any where near him or the house even before the attack just being ordered to leave the house after his mom and dad came home would have ended all contact a different endding would have been better

I am not a romaantic reader BUT this was the best story I have ever sat and read the whole thing. couldnt stop for anything. please write more stories like this one I will be looking for more,or write a book, I would buy it and read it. THANK YOU SO MUCH

i honestly dont know what to say.im speechless that life-cycle thing is sooo true omg i just..........im totally shocked/impressed the whole story was amazing from beginning to finish keep it up or become a full time author

This is one of the best stories I have read in this or any other genre. You are quite a teller of tales. Your characters were all believable and the storyline held me spellbound throughout. Thank you for a beautiful love story that was well worth the read.

Real characters with depth and breadth. Bravo, Tony.

I hope to read you in book form

what a well written story.. knock the socks off my emotions ..Had me glued to it from begining to end . a job well done

Like most here, I clicked and expected the usual, but instead, I get one of the most emotionally arousing stories I have ever read, and I'm not a romantic story/book kinda person. I was glued to it the minute I got past the 1st paragraph haha, couldn't stop til I finished reading it. Please write a book!! haha and do tell us if you do!

Yes, a fantastic story written so very, very well. You certainly do have talent. As said by others, you've touched on every emotion. I am a 62 year old male romantic and was so captured by this story from the beginning paragraph. I couldn't wait to see how it ends, but I didn't want it to end. Friendship, tragedy, lust, apprehension, true love, sex and mystery, sprinkled with well timed humor and bantering between lovers. A story I will certainly read again.