All Comments on 'Bright Eyes'

The last 'no' was just one word too many!

Yes, this is a short tale BUT it says it all. All that's left is the legal stuff and who cares why, when, how, etc. It's over. Thanks for a very poignant story.

But almost all your stories are incomplete. And really not worth reading..

Almost like a premise. Where is the actual story??

I'm mostly disappointed after reading your stuff.

Here I was intently reading (and enjoying) this story when all of a sudden "boom", it ended. WTF!!!!!!!

I mean, you have really pissed me off. This story is totally incomplete.......

I should have read the ending before I started and I could have saved myself a lot of time.....nuff said......

why doesn't this moron finish his shit?

He obviously still loves her and vice versus.

It seems that maybe counciling would either help them find out what caused it and or repair damage. Then they can heal together or separate. It needs another page or two bring completion.

Clearly not that much time when YOU CAN'T FINISH a single fucking story.

see above

I read some of the previous comments. The story is finished, as is the relationship of the characters.

I just assumed the woman doctor in the newspaper story was a harbinger of what was going to happen to Jan. That's my conclusion, lost husband, lost marriage, lost children, lost family. She'll die a loser. What a waste.

Chur bro awesome story

Unfinished

Ohhhhhhhh they're finished, alright. You just weren't paying attention. (goddamned 'Progressive Liberals' have no imagination or common sense)

A short story that said everything that needed saying. (for astute people who HAVE common sense) five *s.

However, this additional comment (Nov. 2018):

(goddamned 'Progressive Liberals' have no imagination or common sense)

Is a remarkably dim-witted addition. Feeble boy. Feeble.

BTB or RAAC it doesn't matter. What is wrong with the reader using some imagination and ending the story as you see fit?

Comprehensively out!

Not often you get a beautifully formed and condensed complete story so succinctly and masterfully told!

Cant wait for the next delivery!

5☆

No beginning; no end. 1 star

I especially like stories that are a brief moment in time. He learned that the unthinkable was true.

I liked it.

one star cause it's unfinished

This would be good if you had more depth and finished them. Im not going to read anymore as I feel like they will all be the same,

Never an excuse for cheating, if you want to screw around don't get married. It was interesting the way you tied what he was seeing in his wifes eyes to seeing the same thing thing in the news paper. There are a lot of mixed up people in this world and some of them should never be married. I thought it was a good story as we all know where and how it would end. Keep writing.

routine so only thre stars. Describes actions and discovery but no real emotional state where the real power in stories lies.

Good story, needed a finish though

Scores 4/5

This is a good story and a very good author.

Short and incomplete.

Wait… where is the story?

This remains one of my favorite stories. It is powerful and you don't need to know the future to know the pain. Great job!

The best short story that I have read on this site 5*

Beautifully-writtten, engaging, so sad! Thank you.

Ed

Very well constructed short story that conveys the sadness caused by the affair. Was it worth it? Well posed question. A real gem

The question is, what is he going to do, and what are they going to do?

The BTBers and the RAAC folks already know what they want.

The question to the author is whether he panders to one side or the other in a continuation

Impressive being able to convey the end of a previously happy marriage and the sadness that goes with it in so few words.

good start, but an unfinished story.

An outstanding author, from the long-Binding Ashes- to the short -Bright Eyes- your writing is phenomenal!

It really needs an ending.

Sad short story but finished.

Unfinished story but at least the husband was not portrayed as a dummy but understood immediately the situation and apparently was taking the right action.Having expressed that...Very well done and presented wonderfully.Its way to short but your good writing and knack for story telling still told the story....I hate 750 words style submissions as it takes time to tell a tale..this story is the exception.

5 stars...PS..please keep true to your style....JZK

I really hate a half finished story.....

and?

Wow, this really pulls on the heart strings. Well written.

These are all pretty good starts to stories.

Flashes really.

Short, but poignant.

That’s a great story, packing so much emotion in a short story.

Well-written and powerful, thanks for a good read.

Very powerful, intense emotions.

Yeah, this was great, but I needed more. It's a beginning or a middle, but needs more development to be a full story.

Great beginning, look forward to parts 2 and 3.

Another story that only proves that the "why" of having an affair is irrelevant. I hope she enjoys her new empty life. Just another run-of-the-mill slut that didn't learn the lesson in advance that it's never worth it.

An unfinished story. So much missing.