All Comments on 'Brooke Ch. 03'

Not what I expected, but was well written and well though out. It was a good read..LAROC OF AGES

atleast brooke wasnt the one getting raped.

Nothing to see here. Time to move on....again.

Looks like this is going to become another rape story and it was looking so promising as well.

After the last instalment I was expecting some quality progress - didn't happen, this story just seems to be spiralling into another ho-hum-so-what-who-cares-whatever kind of missable epic. A bust, no stars

Another well written chapter. Hope the next one comes quick and remember to write the story you want to write.

Watching the new crop of freshmen arrive each year, and do all the stupid shit that would haunt them for the rest of their time as students. "That's Jill. She fucked three guys her first weekend here." "No shit? What a fuckin' slut!" "Yeah. I'd fuck her, if I was desperate, but I wouldn't want anyone to actually find out, let alone see me with her, that fuckin' slut." and so on, and so on. It's one thing, in a fantasy story, to write about hedonism. It's another thing when girls get so weirded out when they get branded "whore" or "slut" or "booty-call bimbo", etc, that they end up transferring out, or just dropping out. And yeah, I watched that play out more than once in my Big Ten school.

Have followed your three chapters eagerly. At last we learn Steven has hair on his chest, a worthy treasure trail, and bushy pubes! You've made Steven seem a more mature, certainly well-developed young man (maybe 20 or 21?). They seem genuinely in love, and their lovemaking sessions can be erotic. I imagine Brooke tracing her fingertips idly over Steven's chest hair, kissing and locking the hairy parts of his chest, around his muscular chest and man nipples, licking along the treasure trail toward her goal in his pubic bush. Now, onto Chapter 4, and their year together at school!

I read your comments, and want this to be a story that you read and enjoy reading. I have ideas to continue the story with Steven and Brooke going off to college together and sharing an apartment. The frat party episode was included, and will be wrapped up in the next chapter. I wanted to give Brooke some insight into what frat parties are really like. With declining readership, and declining ratings, I'm not sure that it would be worth the time to continue the series. If you could offer constructive criticism, and suggestions on how to keep the story hot, I would like to continue. I will judge your Interest by your rating and your comments. If you have suggestions that would make this story more appealing to you, and would make it a hot read, I would like to continue. If you do not see it as a hot story, and give it a high rating, then it's not worth my time to continue. Let me know your thoughts, by commenting here or by sending an email through literotica. I read your comments and consider your thoughts very carefully when writing the story. Constructive criticism and comments leading to improvement of the storyline are very much welcome and appreciated. You determine the future of the series. Negative comments without suggestions for improvement are not helpful. You decide whether you want this series to continue. If it receives a rating of 4.5 or above then I will consider additional chapters. Thank you for reading. TW

Want to hear more about the f'ockey girls and what happened to Amanda. Enjoy the story so far.

One of my favourite series, Tom, and I'd love it if you were to continue it. In the case you decide not to, all 3 have been fantastic, thank you.

ignoring what happens at the very end, was this story hot? Yes. Good? Yes.

The problem was that the story seems to seriously imply that rape occurred. Some people have a fetish for that stuff, but there is a whole another section for that.

It would've been much better if the main character ends up saving the girl instead of rape actually happening, imo. Doing this would've accomplished the same thing for Brooke at the end of the day (Brooke sees the dark side of a frat party, but the crime stops before things get too far).

Yes, there will always be haters, and I feel the rape side story wasn't appropriate for this series, but this story series overall is still very good, and I think certainly deserves continuation.

until the end.

You seem to imply Amber is being gangbanged against her will - maybe even passed out from the closed eyes reference. Or drugged?

Sorry, this was a nice fun weird story, why mess with it?

To each their own I guess....sigh....

Where's Part 4 ??????

Please don't leave us hanging, lots of questions left unanswered with that mysterious ending. :o)

Please hurry!!!

FYI a lot of users will find a story, vote it a 5, and then never go back to check for sequels/next parts. So the ratings will go down for each new part.

I was guilty of that until I made a word doc and now save all stories I like with a link and the last date updated. I check them often now and this one is driving me nuts! PLEASE add part 4 asap!

Also please continue it on onto college together. At the very least we need/want to know what happened to Amanda. Hope to read it very soon. God Speed...

I find myself checking up on this to see if you've posted yet, but nothing. plz continue on with pt4 and so one. :)

TomWine, so far you've done yourself proud. Parts of the first three chapters you really had us on the edge, as it appeared Brooke might just have some reluctance about her and Steven's future together. However, I'm not as worried about Brooke at this point as I am about Steven--he has two wandering eyes, a wandering dick, vivid thoughts about most every sexy girl (aren't all girls sexy to some extent???), and most certainly has lots of opinions about all" the hotties".

Steven needs to be put on a short leash by Brooke now or he's going to present some problems with their relationship. This is a very hot, caring, sexy couple now; as with most readers I would like it to continue this way

As for future chapters, most of the story can take place on holiday weekends, summer vacations and a few special evenings such as a nice dinner with both Brooke and Steven dressed a little sexual (no underwear or no bra--lite titilliation), birthdays, an anniversary they might have such as a date they become "engaged" or a "proposal" of marriage/life committment, or double date with another brother and sister incestual couple, and of course the games that Brooke will have to play and the celebrations when they win (stay away from the drunken brawls and let the Frat boys know they, Brooke and Steven, are off limits). In the summer they can go to a cabin in the mountains or a lake, an inexpensive cruise; and of course be home with their parents, where they will have to confess their life long committment to their parents when they become "engaged"!!

Poor Amanda :(