All Comments on 'Bustyland Ch. 01'

Love how this is going so far! I wasn't expecting Paul to die so quickly though. Seemed like he had a bit of a story arc going, and his end I found rather abrupt. Still, the fairground promises to be a classic but still interesting setting with lots of possibilities. I'm looking forward to seeing what Mary and her crew have in store for our heroes and heroines!

Good story but there are a few grammatical errors, but nothing really big. I wasn't expecting anyone to die but it goes with the story well. I give it 4 stars.