by ColdStar
Good story but there are a few grammatical errors, but nothing really big. I wasn't expecting anyone to die but it goes with the story well. I give it 4 stars.
Love how this is going so far! I wasn't expecting Paul to die so quickly though. Seemed like he had a bit of a story arc going, and his end I found rather abrupt. Still, the fairground promises to be a classic but still interesting setting with lots of possibilities. I'm looking forward to seeing what Mary and her crew have in store for our heroes and heroines!