by writedoctor
yes, plz keep on writing about all the things they do- you're a worse tease than don. in regards to the fascination to tom's foreskin_ i think don should say he likes it cause it's like a bonus- he gets to see this long, meaty cock_ and then when he pulls the foreskin down, he gets the bonus of a large, juicy, mushroom capped, cock head___kinda like finding the prize in a box of cereal- that beautiful, juicy cock head is the toy surprise inside...
need to be a bit more descriptive of their muscular and well formed, adonis like, bodies. you started with looking, touching then moved to licking, sucking. now you have to move to ass munching/licking, finger-fucking, and then full on anal intercourse. and please some body worshipping of those young, hard, muscular studs.....muscle worship- yummy
bonus points for making tom a native american warrior god and don a cowboy who just so happens to worship native american warrior gods.....wouldn't that be hot??? YES
More focused, concise than chapter one. It was also very short. Don gives Tom a bj on a small beach.
Excellent. Very, very well written.
The pace of the storry kind-of mirrors what really goes on in one's inner self.
Tom was depicted superbly, vividly. He was brought to life by the author: i am already worshipping his perfect body & his beautiful dick! I would wisper on Tom's ear, "Buddy, I want YOU to pop my anal cherry. Do it for me, please."
(I've been a bi curious guy since my mid to late teens. I occasionally had homosexual impulses even before but was not yet ready to admit that to myself.)