Carrie and John Pt. 03

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aygoslow
aygoslow
22 Followers

At this point he should have started blaming Carrie and her irrational demands for all this disaster which had befallen him. John didn't, however. He blamed himself. He was ever clearer about the opportunity he had trashed by giving up on the mission she had set him. Pictures of her beautiful, toned body and stunning face floated through his exhausted and distraught mind.

He was really cold now, actually shivering and he aimed for the centre of town to try and mingle with the tourists and try to get some warmth into his body. The rain continued to pour, harder now, as John began to stumble down through the restaurant district of town.

Looking up from the puddles which covered the pavements, he spotted a beautiful red Ferrari. He looked again and realised that it belonged to Carrie, the very car he had seen in her garage when they went cycling. It was parked outside a very expensive restaurant with huge, plate glass windows which proudly displayed the wealthy diners and the exotic dishes they were eating.

Like a child who was lost, John turned and looked through the rain smeared windows and, as his eyes became accustomed to looking through the reflections of the street lamps outside, he caught sight of Carrie.

She was sitting opposite an older man who exuded wealth and confidence. He was also, John thought miserably, very handsome. Carrie looked amazing in a short, off the shoulder black dress which sparkled with what may well have been real diamonds. She wore high heeled shoes and her legs, tanned and toned, gleamed in the soft light of the restaurant. Both she and the mystery man were deep in conversation.

It was some while before she glanced towards the window and an almost imperceptible expression of sorrow passed over her face as she saw John. It was like someone seeing the ghost of a loved one who has only recently died.

Shaking almost uncontrollably with cold, wet and emotion, John fell to his knees. He lifted his hands to his heart in a soundless expression of pleading. Carrie held his gaze for a moment and then went on with her meal, almost as if nothing had happened. The man she was with noticed nothing.

A few moments later a pair of burly waiters came out of the restaurant and hauled John to his feet. They pushed him roughly into the street and he staggered, blinded by rain, tears and an unbearable sense of loss. A bright light seemed to rush towards him and he heard a shout of anguish from one of the waiters. The next thing he knew he was sent flying by the bumper of a car which had swerved to narrowly miss running him down completely.

He was thrown onto the pavement and was briefly aware of a sharp pain in his right leg and a dull ache all over the rest of his body, before he fell unconscious.

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AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Disappointed

I just discovered and read this series. I committed to reading the whole thing so I did. I am very disappointed.

What was set up as a wonderful BDSM story went off the rails in this chapter. By taking away his job, housing, and belongings Carrie has removed John’s ability to truly commit and consentually submit to her. The way the next sequence of events occurs (not giving out the spoiler) further removes his ability to truly consent. It is no longer a BDSM story but a Nonconsent/Reluctance story. I wish the author had allowed him to truly fall into submission as it was such a beautifully done setup.

aygoslowaygoslowover 9 years agoAuthor
Masterfuljim's comment

Thank you for your comment and for following the story through. It is a really good observation you have made. I think Carrie was expecting John to complete his mission (the naked run) and get to his flat to find he had been thrown out of home/work etc.. She would then be able to sweep into the scene and 'rescue' him whilst also complimenting him on his success in obedience. What I hoped would come out of this bit of the story is that it has actually gone wrong for both of them and although it throws them apart, it is going to lead to something great later on (I hope!).

Both Carrie and John actually want each other and their respective roles so much that the normal logic of a relationship is not really working. Finally, Carrie expresses love through domination and this will seem pretty brutal at times. The question is whether John wants to submit so much that he not only goes long with it, but feels blessed by it. I hope this explanation helps a bit!).

Vulcan_in_OhioVulcan_in_Ohioover 9 years ago
Suspect author is female

Obviously dislikes men to do this to John. Very dark and stupid, really.

MasterfuljimMasterfuljimover 9 years ago
Yup

Anon in the previous chapter hit the nail on the head. She is going to force him rather than lead him into the submission.

This also jars with ch1 where she is taught to love her sub. How does leaving him penniless, homeless and jobless equate with that.

Well written story though and I crit because I see a major flaw in proceedings, not because I want to trash the author.

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