by dragonwriter
so much for a good story about a loving family.now its just an orgy involving a family.didnt even get passed where he was talking to chuck only came back for this chapter hoping that you had decided to keep it in the family.
Everyone was forewarned that this was coming, so don't complain. However, you still need to work on your proofreading as there are still some mistakes getting by you. Maybe proofread in edit mode so you you can make corrections as you go along. Otherwise, on to Chapter 12.
"... I could not resist, so I stepped in closely and waived my cockhead at Mom's mouth. "
Get yourself a dictionary, look up 'waive' and 'wave' and then see for yourself why using 'waived' in this context is totally ridiculous!!
I must say that I really wished that you had just kept it in the family and not include another guy from out side the family! Just my thoughts at least