by jman_bigdaddy
Interesting overall plot which could have turned real dark and with just a bit more character development plus a lot more sex expansion you would have a good story.
For a two-page story this is the right amount of sex, you do not want to drown the plot with too many encounters. Certainly this feels like the beginning of a much longer story and I hope to see more. The tension for Alice choosing between an exciting life but one in which she will be a very different creature or remaining human (though presumably with increased sexual confidence) is an interesting one. I look forward to reading more of this story.
I really got into this story and thought it was an intriguing and unique storyline. Great work.