All Comments on 'Cathy's Pleasure Pivot'

can't wait for the follow up(s)!!!!

it's worth developing. Take your time with the sex. Needs drawn out more slowly. J

it's worth developing. Take your time with the sex. Needs drawn out more slowly. J

Just not.

I think your first chapter was very good,it was fast paced,and that's not a bad thing.I do think that you could slow down the pace a little,draw out the sex scenes,and make the mother more submisive.

Overall you have a good story line,and I wish you the best in your writing.

Not remotley belivable, not well written, don't care for mother or son, so I'm done reading about them.

Fascinating.

Most authors wouldn't dare to combine Incest/Taboo, Interracial, and NonConsent/Reluctance, all in one story -- especially their first one.

Keep Going

Nice work please keep writing.

yes i loved and am waiting for more...

Damn,that was a wicked ride, making his mother eat his cum. With her in training, she will get to learn how to please her son/master. That will be a good story to read.Thanks for the erotic story......Rich

For the first chapter. I think you should continue. Now that he has Mom he can train her to bring others into their Relationship. who are either Bored or Submissive and need what he can do. and to Train Mommy that he is her Master.

You should proof-read your story before submitting it though. You should have learned the difference between to, too and two in the 3rd grade. Poor grammar can distract from a good story. I like how it is developing , keep it up.

wrong section