All Comments on 'Caught!'

by jf1978

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AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
PERSPECTIVE!

you need to learn to write in one perspective, there you were doing two perspectives, get someone to proof read !

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Interesting

but rather disconnected throughout. Next time, write the whole story first, then go back and add the sex scenes. It would also be helpful to proofread what you wrote.

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