by HighCastle
Ohmygoodgodalmighty. i'm terribly sorry this isn't more critical, but i'll get back to you when i can think again.
... but as well throughout the story in its separate chapters is something overwhelming the senses. Sensory overload, and I well know that unwanted but undeniable pain of which you've scribed so perfectly. It's a lovely story from top to bottom.
three perfect scenes. Thank you. Knew you could! Take care -- wherever you are in the world.
Normally I don't like stories told in the first person, but this was amazing. I love how it was not the usual slow build up, teasing and whatnot. She is confronted with strong pain immediately---a no nonsense approach to training a submissive. What I want to know is how he will punish her for coming so many times without permission. If he put her through so much pain as a mere introduction, I shudder to think what he will inflict upon her as a true punishment. Please continue this, though I can't fathom yet where you would go. Show us!
Loved the series. Wish commenters didn't throw out punishment or torment suggestions when that was NOT a basis of the story. There is plenty of that already for you blood thirsty people.
No other words for him. He's a dick. Here puppy, be a good puppy for the big man. No thank you. He thinks this is acceptable behavior. It isn't.