All Comments on 'Cheerleader at the Mall'

I liked the story, however, it lacked some things:

Resistance, she seemed to go along with it all awfully quick.

Thoughts and feelings, she was fucked and licked, fine, but what did she feel? What did she think about it all?

Yes you are man. Men don't write lesbian erotica at all well. However we write excellent lesbian porn. Dry my ass, the sandwich was great and with out any of the unneccesary mushiness that would have made this an erotic piece rather than porn.

I'm a straight chick - but that is just how i would love to do a woman!!!

i'm curious, the person below who says that because i am a man seems to to be saying that because of that, i am not capable of writing a good lesbian themed story. hmmmm, thats kinda the same thinking as saying black people are better basketball players than white people cause they can jump higher. my point? your thinking is stupid and very close-minded.

by the way, did you click on the link to see other stories i've written? perhaps something there is more to your liking.

I must agree with Dayfan! This was awesome! I'll be looking forward to you next lesbian piece.

the story is one of my favourites and i am a dyke so I don ;t care if writer is shapeshifting sky blue pink reptile with kleinfeld syndrome.

people who get uptight about this kind of thing need to read 'death of the author' by roland barthes. Now.

keep up the good work!!

Yeah I would have liked a bit more resistance or a curveball thrown into the mix to stay away from cliche. But overall it got me going and I read it quickly wanting to see how it ended.

nice style.

I wonder how a woman could experience what men go through

with another man?

could they write it convincingly?

who cares?

not me.

mnm,n,nm,

good story

loved it! keep writing!

hot

FANTASTIC story

This is one of the best stories i have ever read on any site- keep up the great work

Oh my god. Is it that hard to type "two"?

all through the story it's "2" women. it's so distracting!

My clitty is so hard and my pussy is soo wet i'm going to have to finger myself to a nice cum.