All Comments on 'Cherish'

by SadisticPenguin

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AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Re-read your submission

You started out with the wife in a white filmy nightgown and just a few paragraphs later she is in a t-shirt, pajama bottoms and a bra. A proof reader would have found that in a heart-beat.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
@anonymous, YOU read carefully!

maybe he meant HIS t shirt came off when he was also shedding clothes...,

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago

So... is she wearing a nightgown or a tshirt and pajamas?

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