by redgryphon
The is a well-written romance story, with a good introduction, careful build-up, and good character development. The love scene brings the chapter to a fitting end, but it is much too short, as is the story in general.
your writing was capable of creating very vivid mind pictures in my head and that's what it's all about. I liked the twist in the end as well- icing, as it were. No criticism, just a thank you for a good story. Thank you!
Enjoyed this story and thought it was well writen and a real turn-on!