All Comments on 'Chrissie'

I loved it. A very interesting twist on several story lines and the "Christine" plot. Well done. Michael

kinda dragged on, editing to trim it down a bit would make the story flow better and keep the pace ticking along, but a decent effort anyway

Really well thought out.....so enjoyable....just awesome!

Keep it up !

I think you are selling yourself short, I don't think anyone could have done this concept any better. Thanks.

Wow!!

One of you're best.

It's sort of tongue in cheek science fiction thriller erotic sex story.

Or at least one of the above.

I enjoyed reading the interesting story and let the story suck me in to it's theme.

Thanks for the great read.

Great friggin' story. One of your best. Thanks!!!!

Interesting and different. Kudos!

I don't know quite what genre it belongs in but whichever one it is, it belongs at the top of the heap. Could not stop reading it. Great effort. Thanks!

'nuff said.

What A Wonderful Story! A damn fun read from beginning to end. But you should be aware that yellow is a color reserved for school buses, taxi cabs, and piss. Uhhh . . . Don't tell Chrissie I said that.

*****

Best story ever!

you are good, but killing them was letting them go off easilly

I think Sarah and Crissie are one soul. Anyway, I loved this story!

of course we're all married to our cars. Aren't we??

Incredible story...it had everything!

I guess some would classify this story as science fiction. For me I simply classify it as a great story. I have something to tell you Stang but will send it privately to keep it out of site of the anonymous commentors

THAT is a masterful spinning of a yarn. Great Entertainment.

As a former '68 Mustang owner, I think you should consider that it is not only Mustang owners whose wives cheat. I mean it could scare a guy into buying a Camaro.

I don't usually like serious injury and death in most stories, but this was done with humor. It's like the difference between a "Saw" movie and one of the "Scary Movies". It wasn't real and was not upsetting. Why are beautiful big titted women always sluts that cannot give their husbands kids and then start screwing everyone in town? Be warned, men. Take the small titted, fertile, ugly women if you want to be happy. Good job on the story!

This one is your best story yet. Great ending.

I mean, really, simply brilliant. You took the original story in a way better direction. Funny, well told, and a satisfying ending. Can we ask for more?

And you said you refer harder story concepts to me and DQS because you don't have the ability to run with them?

Bullshit, pure and simple. I don't know about DQS, but I could never write such a wonderful tale.

Out-fucking-standing!!!!

Keep it up.

and completely entertaining.

The authors you named are very good but I don't think you need to pass any stories ideas along to them. You can and do a great job all by yourself.

Keep em coming and we'll keep reading them.

Thanks for your hard work.

Woodmanone

and this is an excellent storyline. The need to classify it smells sort of like burocratic tendencies. The only real surprise for me was the fact that Sandra was pregnant. I thought that she was too smart for her to fall into that trap. All of the story was good fun even the deaths were fantasy cloaked instead of realistic. Thanks Stang

...for originality (I know SK's book was the plot underscore but you gave a better summation of how such a story could go), eroticism (him and Lainie on the hood and the engine started to give them a quicker finish - puts washing machines to shame!), readability and finish.

Great job and thanks.

I loved the story..and with me loving horsepower made this all the better

I have never read the Stephen King book, but know just enough to enjoy this story.

I don't think I even have anything to rant about. A highly enjoyable story. Bravo.

no need to say more

A well written fantasy, a little over the top, but well worth reading. Thanks for the entertainment. ML

Stang,

Inspiring. To come from a closet writer I/(We) read, to a respected author that readers look for daily in New Stories.

Chrisse could have been a wireless mouse, you'd have still written it to rave reviews. Sad for Sarah, Lucky for Lainie.

Respectfully, thanks for sharing on Lit.

x

" ... the big V8 ... made both Elaine and I cum ...

You're too good a writer not to know something as basic as the proper pronoun object of a preposition or verb. It won't take long to learn from any basic English grammar book, and then the big V8 will make "both Elaine and me cum."

It's not that it's all that important in the great scheme of things, one supposes, and you're certainly consistent with this error in your writing – you do it all the time – but it's not unlike a grain of sand in the eye of a reasonably literate reader: not fatal, but annoying. You are, after all, a writer, and it's just as easy to write good English as bad.

Fun....excellent, a 5 1/2 on a 5 star scale

This was a refreshing read. You never quite tie Chrissie and Sarah together but it feels like they are linked? Shanna was a deeply disturbed person. She had to be the center of attention. She had to be the controller of everything. She was without feeling about what she did and didn't even get pleasure out of her sexual interludes except for the control it brought her. She arranges an attack on her roommate to get her guy. Shanna is a frightening and dangerous woman. The relationship between Shanna and Tim is VERY convoluted. I still can't quite grasp how they ended up together. He didn't want to be with her. She was a slut and was just trying to control him. Then she starts "loving" him and changes her behavior and he starts loving her. Then she starts fooling around again and then stops. He works his way through it. Then Butch blackmails her. They never seemed to fit together and something was always happening to show they didn't belong together but he wasn't able to get free of her. Her love was a possessive love which isn't truly love. Tim was to busy taking care of her to recognize that she was a very selfish person. <br><br>

Of course there was the comedy element of The TITS that Conquered the World. Everyone falls before the power of Shanna's tits. Professors change their classes. Men kill for her. Women are under control too. I'm surprised the Army didn't come to town and report to Shanna's tits. <br><br>

Chrissie is pretty scary in her own right. Shanna and Butch's deaths are pretty cut and dried. Butch certainly earned his. Shanna wasn't as blatant but was severely warped as well. However it was a little disturbing to know that Chrissie injured a previous girl Tim was dating so severely that she was still needing treatment. That seems out of "character" for Chrissie. But the rest of the story was very absorbing. It's lucky that Elaine was a car nut.

Fabulous, but do another edit while thinking about closing quotation marks.

this is a LW story? HOW? First off its is predictable as hell. Was anyone Stunned to learn Sarah was run down by Shanna?

Yawn.

This story has the same massive problem that JPB's current piece of shit story has (THE NEXT ONE).

In the JPB story the main character Frank has a series of unbelievably bad experiences with women and doesnt learn. Frank's main squeeze...Allison... lies to him about the prom... cheated on him... and Frank got a ton of shit from their parents because she lied her ass off.

Then after the got back together Alliosn heard a RUMOR that frank was cheating on her... so she went out fuck bing with numerous men and gave Frank the used condoms.

So of course Franks Marry her.

Makes perfect sense.

Same sort of crap here. TIM knows Shanna is out of control lying manipluative slut. She is evil and such a sociopath she makes newt Gingrich look normal.

Tim is told often by numerous other guys. He sees it front of his eyes. Timesays it over and over and over

..."Shanna is out of my league..."

so NATURALLY they get married ??!?!?!?

**KEY POINT *** Tim's plan is to hang out with her and fuck until Shanna moves on to to the next guy. Great. But KNOWING she is Nuts ... knowing she is whore... and self centered why then agree to shack up ? why agree witn marry?

One paragrpah Tim has this strategy. The next Paragraph all his thinking ...all his knowledge about Shanna has left Tim's head.

So what we have here is a another story about a mnan who thinks with his dick.

Yawn. How Original

Contrary to Harry's comments, I loved your writing. OK. there were some predictable parts, but your dialog was simply great in places and the characters were pretty well developed which I like. Best of all you made me laugh at times and want to keep reading.

Thanks, give Chrissie a pat on the hood for me.

This story that was written with the authors tongue very firmly in his cheek.Please do not do a story based on"From a Buick 8" by Steven King,unless it is based in Virginia.The friends comment about Shanna "being two sandwiches short of a picnic" was very,very funny.

I thought that this story was better than the last couple that you have posted. I don't know how you crank the stories out, but I appreciate the effort. I look forward to Thursdays to read the next one.

I'm a Dodge man myself. I almost hit a Mustang today when it pulled out in front of me. My Rumble Bee got me around situation with no problems. In any event, you are a good author! Thanks for sharing your talents with us.

Fun read. different from the usual stories in this site. thanks.

A fun read!

OK, I stuck with it through dozens of typos and misspellings. I even ignored how "she opens up her blouse by pooping a few buttons". But calling a 2006 Mustang a muscle car in the same story as a 1970 Chevelle SS...that's going over the line and that's where I stopped reading. No wonder the cops said the story was unbelievable.

Nice take-off on Steven King.

I felt a little sympathy for Shanna but after hearing what she stooped too for a Chance at Romance and causing him to lose his Lady and Baby.

Maybe she finally got what she Deserved.

Sounds like a re-run of an old sitcom...."My mother...the Car"

A few typos do not detract from this story, maybe the best I ever read here, at least one of the best!

you can write about anything you want. the only thing I would suggest is place it where it belongs and as there is no fairy-tale it's sci-fi and as funny as it was I would not have read it, well I did not read all anyway . It never interested me really. but it was good from cocept till the end.

You know you're a well liked author when so many of us read your stories the day they are posted. Reading comments is always fun as well.

Some of commenter’s remind me of listening to movie reviewers comments. They get so wrapped up in over analyzing and so caught up in their self-importance, they forget how to just enjoy a good story.

I dislike that kind of arrogance and usually skip comments by those people. But, for some reason, I screwed up and read Harry’s comments.

Sorry. I didn’t mean for my comments to detract from the story itself.

Your consistent creativity never ceases to amaze me.

The old adage that those who can't do, teach fits here.

Those who can't do negatively review...

This is definitely a very good read.

Well done Stang!

If Harry hated it, I just think it has to be a wonderful, brilliant tale! Hawkeye and the "Honorable Justice" have already said it better than I can. Thanks again for another outstanding story!

Just one other thing, to all of those who think it was in the wrong category, etc., etc., DID ANY OF YOU BOTHER TO READ THE MAN'S FORWARD???

wish I would have had a coar that would have done that to my ex whore and her boyfriend

Shanna was a woman who was so hot, that men, IF they could make it that far, would only last a few strokes before ejaculating? Shanna must have been one frustated woman.

Good story, I wonder how if would have done in the halloween contest, if you had sat on it, and released it in October.

5 stars & favorite. Excellent, captivating and scary. Christine's little sister is a bumblebee (transformers) mustang. Deadly. Great take on Stephen King's classic. Again, Awesome.

You make it worth while coming on this site, along with a few other unnamed (because it makes Harry jealous, since he can never be one of them) authors.

I love it! What a wonderful fantasy. Having someone looking after our back.

This is Sarah, not Chrissie.

One of the few times I've given a story a 5. Is Chrissie Sarah or not, if she is she obviously don't mind the name change. I both do & don't want a continuation for this.

Much better the Stephen King hope he doesn't come after you because you write better than him!!!

nice read will worth time.

Thank you

Thanks for bringing us a whole new twist on the LW story.

Five stars and in my opinion, the most enjoyable one this author has written. Good bit of humor, even satire. The story of course has the prerequisite double D's on the love interest and the inevitable, souped-up mustang. Thanks for writing.

Great story and a lengthy but comfortable read (except for Butch and Shanna!). Seriously, discuss possible movie rights with LMN.

Harry in the VA...get over it! It was definitely a 6-stars story versus your wimpy "2.68" stars stories.

I liked the Hot Rod horror. Was some of this a poke at another story? If it was...you get a ten. Those big titted college girls do not know how to keep their legs closed. I have a Vette that doesn't like my wife. She has never gotten it out of the driveway, I think that is a good thing. Stiff pedals and pretty fair cam make it an all or nothing experience. My wife can drive, but the car will not cooperate with her. The car actually stalled once when she approached, I told her to back away slowly and everything would be fine. She didn't think it was funny. She does think that there is some sort of conspiracy going on concerning the car, whatever it is, I like it. The car seems destined to have one driver. :) Watch out Ice Cream Man, these writer types might disown you if you mention the likes of Van Halen again. Good story.

Stang ; I realy am impressed with your writing. Your story lines are unique. While there are some simularitys they are still your storys. I like your work imensley and can't wait for your next wonderful story.

THANK YOU

Well done as usual, I have come to expect good reading from you but this was one of your best..... Keep writing & I will keep reading & smiling thanks & again, well done

Found this via a good writer's favourites' favourites' favourites. What a wonderful story, expertly managed and written! I was surprised that you were so humble about your writing abilities, as I read through the story. You're a fabulous writer! You kept me hanging on every word to the very last. What a wonderful fantasy – and I'm not even into cars! And best of all, I was convinced it was written by a woman, because it was so sensitively handled, and because the protagonist didn't lay shit on the woman, but simply tried to understand where she was in her head. Incredible! I don't usually read LW stories, but this breaks the mould big-time. Writers of LW take note: This is how to write an engaging, arousing story. It's going into my favourites. Thank you for a most entertaining read.

Well done, SS. The story grabbed my attention to the end.

What a thrill reading this story. As I was reading the intro, I was hoping...then I looked at the title and a smile appeared on my face. Suddenly warm tingles exploded throughout my body. YES! He wrote it! Then I thought will it live up to my expectations. YES! God I loved this story. Thank you. It blew away any of my misgivings. An aside, I loved the Debbie B...oops I mean the Shanna character. Please allow DSQ to borrow Chrissie for a ride and a coda! Again thank you. I can't wait to visit this story again and again! Spectacular!

nothing else to say. once again, a great story from you!!!!

The plot was clever, the story well written and put together it has been delightfully entertaining. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Five

This story really rocked. I loved it and you are favorited

You don't do your paragraphs correctly. You are obsessed with Mustangs (Haven't read a story of your's yet which didn't mention one)

You tend to over use the 'Barney Fife' "Jethro" etc put downs (Two stories at least of the three or four I read)

IIRC, there were a few usage errors probably brought about by misusing spellcheck.

Still, the story flows, the dialouge was mostly believable, and some of the premises were interesting.

Great story, thanks.

Its amazing. I give it a 10!

Being a huge King fan I enjoyed this twisted love story even more. Of course it begs the question of whether his dead girlfriends spirit occupied the car. It would make his wife's death even more poignant. A tremendous story with just the right level of love, lust betrayal, and supernatural spookiness. King would be proud.

I agree with with FD45 you do need a context editor like many others - grammar and usage checking is harder than spell checking and since you are writing it you KNOW what you meant and probably do not see the errors - most of us don't when we write.

The story was great - well written and fun too - the length got a little close - "too" but it worked for me -

stop bitching about grammar, the man can write, it you want to bitch about grammar become a fucking teacher. StangStar06 is the fucking man.

What a wonderful story!! Fantastic! Unreal, Amazing! It's so far out of reality, it's almost believable! very nicely done, well thought out. Great job!

Chrissie is Sarah????? If I am wrong chrissie, I do apologize :)

Actually, the story belongs in "weird science fiction" if there was such a catagory. Nevertheless, I rated it 5*****.

belongs in Science Fiction

or in Horror

or in an asylum

belongs in Science Fiction

or in Horror

or in an asylum

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DWmoroncok to get bumped

off the page

vaya con dios

DWmoroncok to get bumped

off the page

vaya con dios

No problem about loving Mustangs, I have only had one and loved it. Loved the story if it was a little spooky. All's well that ends well. HAH!

Just damn..

Mustang my first new car was a 68 fastback what a car, great story

...But Sarah's family deserved some kind of justice. I don't see how he could still have any feelings for Shanna after learning her part in killing his girlfriend and unborn child.

and the Tangs lead the herd. TK U MLJ LV NV

More Chrissie!!!

She is SO good that she does not even need her own story. She just adds an unparalleled zip to another story.

You really expect us to believe two normal sized, non double jointed adults could have sex and conceive a baby... In the back seat of a Mustang???

:-)

As always this was a fantastic story...Somebody here wrote a part two for this and I cannot seem to find it again...Anyone help me out???

first let me tell you that in the 60's i made a baby in a stang's back seat - so it is possible. i wont bother you with the how, being a teen and hot is all you need to know. i know, i have the child to prove it, but he is over 40 now.

i have downloaded this story and fucking love to re-read it. that way i dont have to be on line. a loving stang and the baby in the back seat is perfect.

bright yellow and sounding mellow. I love the way this story was crafted and how the right woman understood.

Thanks!

o this was an incredible story.could be a very good series .

i have read this story so many times i almost know it by heart i love it and thanks for all your fine stories! ralph_s48@yahoo.com

I read this after StSt posted it and re-read it today. Great story--clever and well-paced.

beyond our control and understanding, TK U MLJ LV NV

A very beautiful story. Have read it twice but still want to read again and maybe again.

Christine before the connection was made. Then when Sarah got tapped I thought Shana might've had a hand in that. Great story.

It seems that I have read nearly all of your stories before and am delighted when I find one that is new to me. (Unless it involves a male screwing a male, I just quit reading when I come to that. I have relatives and friends that are gay and I love the relatives and like the friends but that does not mean that I like to read about it, though.) Thank you for writing.

And, yes, when the accident happened the thought crossed my mind that the Witch was involved somehow. Then I forgot about it as the story evolved.