by abroadsword
makes sense, though I can't be sure it makes common sense. A beautifully written story, a clever ending and, at least, food for thought. Abroadsword, please continue with your story writing, your talent requires it.
At first I was annoyed by the run-on sentences, then I got into the swing of it and see it is your unique style. I enjoyed the rhythm it created.
Original story, fantastic detail!
John is a humorous character, and Clarissa also made me smile. (At one point you called her Camilla)
I would've liked it better if she had orgasms too.
I liked Brabbinger too. You could flesh out his character.