by xxx_willow_xxx
I have to say one thing here....this is by no means 'boring' as you seem to surprise the reader and throw unexpected things our way! I am totally enjoying this story and seriously hope you plan on adding much, much more to it.
The only thing I would like is a bit longer chapters. When a story grabs the readers attention and sucks them in, it's a bit of a ....*ughhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh* type of feeling when it's only a page and is over too soon but that's what happens I suppose when the story is that good...the reader wants more and more! :)
All in all, I think you are writing a great story. The characters are like-able and your writing has brought them to life as I feel like I 'know' them.
Please keep going on this. I look forward to the next chapters.