by russello
Loved the subject and the idea, well done. Sure wish such a program existed, would make family night so much more interesting!
It was short, but it had a lot of detail. It also has very few typos. Overall, it's a great story.
Didn't need any more detail as it was a short story, to the point, and set the atmosphere perfectly. Thanks for a good read!
Good concept! Reading pleasure would be enhanced if we knew who these 2 people were before the rape! Tell us why it was so important and thrilling for this particular man to be able to rape this particular woman.
good concept , but a little too short , I'm wondering if a 2nd chapter could be possible , I know i couldn't write a part 2 . having said that 75% is not a bad score either